Talo Segura

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I have 30 stories published in 3 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 4442 times and 16 of my stories have been cherry picked.
16 of my 68 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 20 votes

My stories

Camp Echo - Chapter 12

Chapter Twelve - Radar Love second edition “I hate coming in here in the morning to a pile of dirty dishes.” Max stood in front of the sink staring...

Camp Echo - Chapter 11

Chapter Seven - Take a Chance on Me second edition Lucky it wasn't a heavy day at work, because both Max and Aeriol felt tired. They were only...

Camp Echo - Chapter 10

Chapter Ten - Coke for Germany second edition Living with Aeriol you never knew exactly where you were, what would happen next, who might arrive on...

Camp Echo - Chapter 9

Chapter Nine - Davy and Nathan second edition It rang four times before someone picked up. “Hello,” the voice answered. “Ah, yeah, hi...” Max couldn’...

Camp Echo - Chapter 8

Chapter Eight - Introductions Second Edition Max woke early, it was cold in the apartment, it was always cold, and he hated that. A bit of sunshine...


16 of my comments have received 20 Great Feedback votes

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Wonderful piece

Posted on Sun, 16 Feb 2020

I loved reading this, but I suppose the thing to remember, and I'm sure your grandfather would have said the same, sometimes you have to "take it all with a pinch of salt." Let the grand kids fact check - pinch of salt!

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Posted in Playing Checkers with Elton John

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It's always

Posted on Fri, 31 Jan 2020

It's always the young who pay the price

As the old fools sit and roll the dice.

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Posted in A Hymn for Silent Bells

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Posted on Thu, 30 Jan 2020

I read it, had to look up some words, couldn't find "groan-sat." I don't really think I understood it. It was supercharged with imagery, but the descriptions seemed truncated and it jumped. I think I'm not clever enough to read this, although I...

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Posted in Lose the ivory towers - a novel

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Loved the twist

Posted on Wed, 29 Jan 2020

Half expected something was up with the classic line, "I'm a doctor." Are you going to continue the story? More portraits of people in the city or what happens when Grace emerges onto the night time streets of Manor House? There's a few things to...

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Posted in On the Night Tube Home

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The End...

Posted on Tue, 21 Jan 2020

First, thank you to everyone who read and commented. Those comments are both very nice to receive and useful points to note. I am also very appreciative of being picked as Book of the Week, as well as the cherry awards, a great honour.


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Posted in Milo Chapter Eleven

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From a band playing music, to

Posted on Tue, 14 Jan 2020

From a band playing music, to setting up a tepee, planting lovely yellow and gold flowers for tiedyeing, barbecues on hot rocks, and the cats watching it all, everything happened in that garden in Swindon, inspired in part by the heritage of a...

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Posted in An Unexpected Change