Talo Segura

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I have 30 stories published in 3 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 4306 times and 16 of my stories have been cherry picked.
16 of my 68 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 20 votes

My collections

My stories

The Komsomol - Part Two

They set off together, the two of them. Pavel was the oldest person there, apart from the camp director. At twenty-eight it was his final year...

The Komsomol - Part One

The ladder creaked and little clouds of dust followed behind the boy as he climbed down through the trap. "What are you doing up there, Sacha?" He...

I Hope You Remember Me.

"I hope you remember me?" He wrote! Of course I remember that nice boy with his southern drawl who writes some interesting stuff and tries to survive...
Cherry

Camp Echo - Chapter 14

Chapter Fourteen – The Darkness of the Night. second edition “Jules, long time no see,” Max smiled as he entered the lounge. Jules looked up and...

Camp Echo - Chapter 13

Chapter Thirteen - When the Cat's Away. Second Edition Max really did not want to be involved in Jake's deal so he stayed in his room and ignored the...

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16 of my comments have received 20 Great Feedback votes

2 Votes

Too funny...

Posted on Thu, 09 Apr 2020

When you wrote: 

“Why didn’t you just turn the light back on, Dwayne?”

“Doggone it, you’re right, Mr. Danger! Geez! Why didn’t I see that part comin’?

You cracked me up, too funny!  Great story, I had a picture of each...

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Posted in The Coffee Pot on the Corner - A Craven Danger Mystery

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What I love

Posted on Thu, 30 Jan 2020

What I love is how you paint the picture with the thoughts and recollections of Pat's husband, the story's hero. Because he is a hero, a quiet man walking through the emotional memories of the past. The loss of his son, I feel is something he has...

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Posted in There Was The House and There Was The Sea (2)

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Melancholic

Posted on Thu, 30 Jan 2020

I was carried away on a wave of wistful melancholy as the present day recalled the past family holidays to a house that like life he could not yet say goodbye to. The descriptions were entirely realistic, almost too realistic, because the...

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Posted in There Was The House and There Was The Sea (1)

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Okay, I struggled...

Posted on Wed, 29 Jan 2020

I struggled to understand all the references, but got picked up and swept along in the mood of the piece and anyhow, anyone, even a foreigner, could see this really was "the stuff of life!"

 

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Posted in Not dark yet

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A sad, yet very real, slice

Posted on Wed, 08 Jul 2020

A sad, yet very real, slice of life which revolved around a folk music evening in The Wheatsheaf, an Essex pub. The descriptions and narrative were excellent and perfectly conjured the atmosphere, emotions, and setting. The characters...

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Posted in Black Friday

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Saltburn

Posted on Sun, 15 Mar 2020

Having passed so much time reading about Saltburn and being geeky by nature, one arm twisted the other, and I was forced to look up the town on WhoGoes Maps. Much to my delight, I discovered it has a lovely pier (Oh we do like to be...

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Posted in Sven Goes to War. Part 2. Private Life.

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Interesting dreams

Posted on Mon, 16 Mar 2020

I suspect a lot of people have had similar dreams, a variation on the same theme, I have. An interesting question is why? Why would we dream the same dream? 

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Posted in The Story Book.

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Pretty wild

Posted on Mon, 02 Mar 2020

I mean really interesting, for a bedroom adventure, nostalgia and a Sinclair Spectrum, the man went on to manufacture an ever so British electric car... Which you had to pedal! Always wanted one of those... EBay perhaps? Although no doubt they...

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Posted in On the Spectrum

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I think you cast the net wide

Posted on Tue, 18 Feb 2020

I think you cast the net wide and we were in for the long trawl, whilst you baited us with fishy tales which threw down the gauntlet to us readers, who were nothing if not mitten an now it's all over I'm like a fish out of water and all at sea,...

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Posted in The Aquarium. Part 5. I Can’t Make You Love Me.

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Jacques Rivette

Posted on Sun, 16 Feb 2020

I didn't recognise the name, but I loved Celine and Julie Go Boating. But back to the story, super, enjoyed the last four parts, with the exception of the rather gory slaughtering of seals with nailed clubs. I believe they still do that on one of...

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Posted in The Aquarium. Part 4. King Kong. Jacques Cousteau. WWII. A rescue. A death.

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