Talo Segura
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I have 30 stories published in
3 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 21005 times
and 16 of my stories have been cherry picked.
13 of my 59 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 17 votes
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The Komsomol - Part Two
They set off together, the two of them. Pavel was the oldest person there, apart from the camp director. At twenty-eight it was his final year...
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The Komsomol - Part One
The ladder creaked and little clouds of dust followed behind the boy as he climbed down through the trap. "What are you doing up there, Sacha?" He...
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I Hope You Remember Me.
"I hope you remember me?" He wrote! Of course I remember that nice boy with his southern drawl who writes some interesting stuff and tries to survive...
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Camp Echo - Chapter 14
Chapter Fourteen – The Darkness of the Night. second edition “Jules, long time no see,” Max smiled as he entered the lounge. Jules looked up and...
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Camp Echo - Chapter 13
Chapter Thirteen - When the Cat's Away. Second Edition Max really did not want to be involved in Jake's deal so he stayed in his room and ignored the...
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Too funny...
Posted on Thu, 09 Apr 2020
When you wrote:
“Why didn’t you just turn the light back on, Dwayne?”
“Doggone it, you’re right, Mr. Danger! Geez! Why didn’t I see that part comin’?
You cracked me up, too funny! Great story, I had a picture of each...
Read full commentPosted in The Coffee Pot on the Corner - A Craven Danger Mystery
What I love
Posted on Thu, 30 Jan 2020
What I love is how you paint the picture with the thoughts and recollections of Pat's husband, the story's hero. Because he is a hero, a quiet man walking through the emotional memories of the past. The loss of his son, I feel is something he has...
Read full commentPosted in There Was The House and There Was The Sea (2)
Melancholic
Posted on Thu, 30 Jan 2020
I was carried away on a wave of wistful melancholy as the present day recalled the past family holidays to a house that like life he could not yet say goodbye to. The descriptions were entirely realistic, almost too realistic, because the...
Read full commentPosted in There Was The House and There Was The Sea (1)
Okay, I struggled...
Posted on Wed, 29 Jan 2020
I struggled to understand all the references, but got picked up and swept along in the mood of the piece and anyhow, anyone, even a foreigner, could see this really was "the stuff of life!"
Read full commentPosted in Not dark yet
Super tale, loved it!
Posted on Fri, 23 Aug 2024
This was a very engaging, super story, with great narrative, dialogue, and characters. I was sorry it ended because it could have continued, but I realise the theme was the folkloric festival which embodied the changes in the main character's...
Read full commentPosted in Turnips and a scapegoat - Chapter 8
A sad, yet very real, slice
Posted on Wed, 08 Jul 2020
A sad, yet very real, slice of life which revolved around a folk music evening in The Wheatsheaf, an Essex pub. The descriptions and narrative were excellent and perfectly conjured the atmosphere, emotions, and setting. The characters...
Read full commentPosted in Black Friday
Interesting dreams
Posted on Mon, 16 Mar 2020
I suspect a lot of people have had similar dreams, a variation on the same theme, I have. An interesting question is why? Why would we dream the same dream?
Read full commentPosted in The Story Book.
Pretty wild
Posted on Mon, 02 Mar 2020
I mean really interesting, for a bedroom adventure, nostalgia and a Sinclair Spectrum, the man went on to manufacture an ever so British electric car... Which you had to pedal! Always wanted one of those... EBay perhaps? Although no doubt they...
Read full commentPosted in On the Spectrum
It's always
Posted on Fri, 31 Jan 2020
It's always the young who pay the price
As the old fools sit and roll the dice.
Read full commentPosted in A Hymn for Silent Bells
Confused!
Posted on Thu, 30 Jan 2020
I read it, had to look up some words, couldn't find "groan-sat." I don't really think I understood it. It was supercharged with imagery, but the descriptions seemed truncated and it jumped. I think I'm not clever enough to read this, although I...
Read full commentPosted in Lose the ivory towers - a novel
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