VeraClark

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I have 11 stories published in 0 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 9211 times and 19 of my stories have been cherry picked.
324 of my 3,340 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 329 votes

324 of my comments have received 329 Great Feedback votes

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The repetition and rhyme in

Posted on Thu, 19 Nov 2015

The repetition and rhyme in this love song makes something restorative of deep loss.It sounds soothing, it's very well composed, satisfying to hear aloud.

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Posted in Rupture (Poetry Monthly)

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The key image of chick and

Posted on Wed, 18 Nov 2015

The key image of chick and the emotions of letting go with flight are so delicately spun together in a gorgeous snapshot. It's evocative, the rich scents and .the outdoors steep it in a specific time and place . I love this.

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Posted in Supplication

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I liked the pulls and drags

Posted on Fri, 13 Nov 2015

I liked the pulls and drags of this, how the setting soothes.

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Posted in Home

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Wonderful use of a very

Posted on Fri, 13 Nov 2015

Wonderful use of a very fitting analogy. I hope all's well in your silvery world.

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Posted in Joyride

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Hi cassis, it's nostalgic and

Posted on Sun, 18 Oct 2015

Hi cassie, it's nostalgic and very candid. A thoughtful response to the brief. I would consider taking 'meandering' out as bit cliched and 'had' on line 3 could go for smoother ride.

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Posted in End of the road (Poetry Monthly)

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I think the narrative stream

Posted on Fri, 16 Oct 2015

I think the narrative stream works as a child's distraction very well. I think you could take the double 'no no' 'yes yes' out and have singulars without it affecting structure. More natural. I'd be inclined to take more out - make your reader...

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Posted in In ver ness (Poetry Monthly)

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What a super piece. Dark and

Posted on Tue, 27 Oct 2015

What a super piece. Dark and light.

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Posted in Some days begin with a swim

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This is really sweet. I feel

Posted on Wed, 21 Oct 2015

This is really sweet. I feel the ending needs more welly... that last line feels it should be a crescendo ending rather than a fine one but that may be my impression.

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Posted in discord to harmony (revised)

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I really like how this

Posted on Tue, 20 Oct 2015

I really like how this condenses so much and doesn't lose depth in the economy. The narrative voice has the hindsight of maturity in it - and gets more cynical towards sister as you go.

VeraClark

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324 of my comments have received 329 Great Feedback votes

The repetition and rhyme in

The key image of chick and

I liked the pulls and drags

Wonderful use of a very

Hi cassis, it's nostalgic and

I think the narrative stream

What a super piece. Dark and

This is really sweet. I feel

I really like how this

Mythical and gorgeous

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