VeraClark

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I have 7 stories published in 0 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 3376 times and 11 of my stories have been cherry picked.
321 of my 3,326 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 326 votes

321 of my comments have received 326 Great Feedback votes

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Wonderful use of a very

Posted on Fri, 13 Nov 2015

Wonderful use of a very fitting analogy. I hope all's well in your silvery world.

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Posted in Joyride

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Hi cassis, it's nostalgic and

Posted on Sun, 18 Oct 2015

Hi cassie, it's nostalgic and very candid. A thoughtful response to the brief. I would consider taking 'meandering' out as bit cliched and 'had' on line 3 could go for smoother ride.

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Posted in End of the road (Poetry Monthly)

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I think the narrative stream

Posted on Fri, 16 Oct 2015

I think the narrative stream works as a child's distraction very well. I think you could take the double 'no no' 'yes yes' out and have singulars without it affecting structure. More natural. I'd be inclined to take more out - make your reader...

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Posted in In ver ness (Poetry Monthly)

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What a super piece. Dark and

Posted on Tue, 27 Oct 2015

What a super piece. Dark and light.

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Posted in Some days begin with a swim

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This is really sweet. I feel

Posted on Wed, 21 Oct 2015

This is really sweet. I feel the ending needs more welly... that last line feels it should be a crescendo ending rather than a fine one but that may be my impression.

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Posted in discord to harmony (revised)

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I really like how this

Posted on Tue, 20 Oct 2015

I really like how this condenses so much and doesn't lose depth in the economy. The narrative voice has the hindsight of maturity in it - and gets more cynical towards sister as you go.

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Posted in 'Go Now'

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