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Love it. Absolutely love this

Posted on Tue, 08 Dec 2015

Love it. Absolutely love this. It's small, strong, statemented, shapely, says something, carries lots of weight, like the gorgeous mother and babe up there being shocking, like the sharp dual profile of both a baby sucking and a breast.

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Posted in Flesh in Profile (poetry monthly)

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The present tense gives it

Posted on Sun, 06 Dec 2015

The present tense gives it immediacy and as far as I can see, you stay on track. Some lovely description and a sense of drama. You could perhaps reduce your use of adjectives in some parts so it doesn't feel too overloaded as it ends up reducing...

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Posted in Ice Heart Prts (1-4)

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Hypnotised me! Superb.

Posted on Sun, 06 Dec 2015

Hypnotised me! Superb.

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Posted in Solemates (Poetry Monthly)

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Had a very interesting

Posted on Sat, 05 Dec 2015

Had a very interesting discussion about plot and the surreal in stories. Thought of your work. Sometimes you can have startling ambiguity in a piece and that sense of not necessarily being given the pencil to join all the dots because it doesnt...

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Posted in Lord of flies

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Oh it's lovely Marcia. Your

Posted on Thu, 03 Dec 2015

Oh it's lovely Marcia. Your language is delicate, very soothing to see, too. Really excited you've had a go. The repetition in this strikes me - the gulls gulls gulls. My favourite is the use of brackets - rays of sun? I think so. If you tag it...

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Posted in look away ..... .... ... .. . . . . . ."Poetry Monthly"

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Horridly painful, an

Posted on Fri, 04 Dec 2015

Horridly painful, an unbearable device to use before and after in that interchangeable way which we know isnt so. A powerful, well drawn piece.

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Posted in Preparing to Meet Your Goliath

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This is simply put but has

Posted on Wed, 02 Dec 2015

This is simply put but has universal connections. I like how it ends unfixed.

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Posted in Dark Places

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Welcome to ABCTales, Ken. I

Posted on Wed, 02 Dec 2015

Welcome to ABCTales, Ken. An interesting ntroduction, perhaps the formatting could be adjusted to set your text in bigger paragraph blocks so you can fit more per page.

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Posted in Lamar Theater - Chapter 1

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