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You make a whole new world

Posted on Wed, 23 Mar 2016

You make a whole new world make sense. The detail on childhood is believable and gives just enough sense of coldness and detachment to not to want to ever go back. 

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Posted in The Net Caster (Part Seventeen)

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Oh, it's a beauty and

Posted on Tue, 22 Mar 2016

Oh, it's a beauty and emotionally crushing. Love the juxtaposition of the cosy domestic scene against the bulb's tombs, unsettling, stays with you. Holds us far away then some close proximity, a way in at the line about the son and the daughter....

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Posted in The Naming of Bulbs

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A tense read and wonderfully

Posted on Mon, 21 Mar 2016

A tense read and wonderfully constructed.

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Posted in Three cold kisses

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There are some poignant

Posted on Fri, 18 Mar 2016

There are some poignant hallucinatory type images here, resonant ones that stay with you. Unsettling and dark, the vulnerable images of her lost at night and the folklore narrative style make it very arresting.

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Posted in The Time Saver's Daughter

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Cut 'can one agree' perhaps.

Posted on Mon, 07 Mar 2016

Cut 'can one agree' perhaps. Substitute with something else. The question doesn't have the same welly.

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Posted in One (Inspiration Point)

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What a rant. This is fire in

Posted on Mon, 07 Mar 2016

What a rant. This is fire in the belly stuff. Such a satisfying read, your use of rhetorical statements layers up persuasion.

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Posted in One (Inspiration Point)

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What a tempo this has, all

Posted on Fri, 04 Mar 2016

What a tempo this has, all the sibilance and alliteration, the fast paced punch of a mother's sick mind. Most moving. Would like to hear this, it is far-reaching and word placement is immaculate. Are you up for one edit suggestion? If unwanted,...

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Posted in Nuthoused

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Very affecting. Colloquial

Posted on Wed, 02 Mar 2016

Very affecting. Colloquial tone is effective, child-like lens too.

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Posted in Too Cold for Snow...

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This is so sharp. I really

Posted on Thu, 25 Feb 2016

This is so sharp. I really like it. The contrast of IT and field mouse is well drawn, the power of nature and literary word too. You touch on the the three blind mice nursery rhyme, and perception beyond visual sight, extended with wit and pizazz...

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Posted in Mouse.poem

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This is really beautiful. Two

Posted on Thu, 25 Feb 2016

This is really beautiful. Two things: One, you captured the person inside the anonymous and stereotypically perceived homeless guy, one, you've used a pen portrait in unusual colours to restore social hope. It's a very strong piece of work in my...

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Posted in Painting the Homeless Godly

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