Love this, Tina. Bottled 'laughter' is my childhood obsession. Used to fill bottles with laughter from age 7, still have them, don't dare take the lids off. You've applied a dear metaphor to a much loved person. Except it isn't a metaphor, it's...
John, the concept is good and your ideas strong but I reckon it needs more action.Children need pulling in quick and your age target means that the children are old enough for vibrant dialogue and humour plus they are able to be introduced to...
Hello Jamescasaki, welcome to ABC Tales. Shout if you're not sure of anything, it's a helpful place. I liked the solidarity of Charley and the weight of friendship in this tale, it ends on a high note. It feels a little rushed in places and you...
I did, too. fixourmachine, love the delicacy in your details. The shyness is well expressed - the dialogue works. One thing, I felt, was that the ending seems to tail off abruptly, seems a little rushed and would be a shame after such a strong...
This has got clean down to my core and it hurt. Her vulnerability is so starkly conveyed. Your discomforting spill on social care standards is really sharp, then you strip right down to humanity to expose that in-built recoil in all of us, that...
This is packed with such depths that I've been back for several helpings. Reminded me in many ways of a pantoum. Dipping into past memories and places, all those painful emotions, in that dreamy style. It charms you along with heart jerks along...
A gorgeous study of nature.
Posted on Fri, 22 Apr 2016
A glorious study of nature.
Read full commentPosted in Where the Bee Sucks
Love this, Tina. Bottled
Posted on Thu, 26 Dec 2013
Love this, Tina. Bottled 'laughter' is my childhood obsession. Used to fill bottles with laughter from age 7, still have them, don't dare take the lids off. You've applied a dear metaphor to a much loved person. Except it isn't a metaphor, it's...
Read full commentPosted in Mistletoe and Mothballs
John, the concept is good and
Posted on Fri, 21 Nov 2014
John, the concept is good and your ideas strong but I reckon it needs more action.Children need pulling in quick and your age target means that the children are old enough for vibrant dialogue and humour plus they are able to be introduced to...
Read full commentPosted in The Luffins
Hello Jamescasaki, welcome to
Posted on Mon, 13 Oct 2014
Hello Jamescasaki, welcome to ABC Tales. Shout if you're not sure of anything, it's a helpful place. I liked the solidarity of Charley and the weight of friendship in this tale, it ends on a high note. It feels a little rushed in places and you...
Read full commentPosted in A New School Year
This is full of mystery! Will
Posted on Thu, 10 Jul 2014
This is full of mystery! Will there be a follow up to explain what happened that fateful night? Hope so.
Read full commentPosted in Chapter Four: The Stolen Letters of Regret
I did, too. fixourmachine,
Posted on Sat, 10 May 2014
I did, too. fixourmachine, love the delicacy in your details. The shyness is well expressed - the dialogue works. One thing, I felt, was that the ending seems to tail off abruptly, seems a little rushed and would be a shame after such a strong...
Read full commentPosted in In The Springtime
This has got clean down to my
Posted on Tue, 28 Jan 2014
This has got clean down to my core and it hurt. Her vulnerability is so starkly conveyed. Your discomforting spill on social care standards is really sharp, then you strip right down to humanity to expose that in-built recoil in all of us, that...
Read full commentPosted in Notes on the State of Adult Social Care - 1. The Standard High Backed Chair; Adjustable - Without Wings
This is packed with such
Posted on Sun, 08 Dec 2013
This is packed with such depths that I've been back for several helpings. Reminded me in many ways of a pantoum. Dipping into past memories and places, all those painful emotions, in that dreamy style. It charms you along with heart jerks along...
Read full commentPosted in Paralysis and release
Bring back the olden days. A
Posted on Mon, 17 Nov 2025
Bring back the olden days. A sharp, gloom of a piece. Sometimes we need shards to hurt us, to see clearly! Hello Jane.
Read full commentPosted in The World is Closed
Loved this. A circus of wordy
Posted on Mon, 21 Jul 2025
Loved this. A circus of wordy legends. Where is Walrus these days?
Read full commentPosted in Homage
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