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321 of my comments have received 326 Great Feedback votes

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The mirroring of each natural

Posted on Wed, 30 Mar 2016

The mirroring of each natural act illuminates biology and does a tremendous job of overwhelming your reader's emotions through vivid, dramatic imagery that is full of sensitivity. Gorgeous.

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Posted in First Breath:Last Breath

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There is something gothic and

Posted on Tue, 29 Mar 2016

There is something gothic and macabre growing bigger here as you read, the merge of frozen nature and frozen child (perhaps child, I dont know) You create a stark tableau.Great use of repetition, I think this is beautiful.

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Posted in Chanter - (poetry monthly)

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All that suffering's worth it

Posted on Mon, 28 Mar 2016

All that suffering's worth it, you can feel the chemistry. Some razor lines, a touch of wit, a rabbit and a threat.

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Posted in Her eyes became the future

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You make a whole new world

Posted on Wed, 23 Mar 2016

You make a whole new world make sense. The detail on childhood is believable and gives just enough sense of coldness and detachment to not to want to ever go back. 

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Posted in The Net Caster (Part Seventeen)

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Oh, it's a beauty and

Posted on Tue, 22 Mar 2016

Oh, it's a beauty and emotionally crushing. Love the juxtaposition of the cosy domestic scene against the bulb's tombs, unsettling, stays with you. Holds us far away then some close proximity, a way in at the line about the son and the daughter....

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Posted in The Naming of Bulbs

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A tense read and wonderfully

Posted on Mon, 21 Mar 2016

A tense read and wonderfully constructed.

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Posted in Three cold kisses

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There are some poignant

Posted on Fri, 18 Mar 2016

There are some poignant hallucinatory type images here, resonant ones that stay with you. Unsettling and dark, the vulnerable images of her lost at night and the folklore narrative style make it very arresting.

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Posted in The Time Saver's Daughter

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Cut 'can one agree' perhaps.

Posted on Mon, 07 Mar 2016

Cut 'can one agree' perhaps. Substitute with something else. The question doesn't have the same welly.

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Posted in One (Inspiration Point)

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What a rant. This is fire in

Posted on Mon, 07 Mar 2016

What a rant. This is fire in the belly stuff. Such a satisfying read, your use of rhetorical statements layers up persuasion.

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What a tempo this has, all

Posted on Fri, 04 Mar 2016

What a tempo this has, all the sibilance and alliteration, the fast paced punch of a mother's sick mind. Most moving. Would like to hear this, it is far-reaching and word placement is immaculate. Are you up for one edit suggestion? If unwanted,...

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Posted in Nuthoused

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