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Posted on Fri, 12 Aug 2016
I love this,but feel you repeat the same sounds from verse one to three.Feel it reduces impact. Do say if it is deliberate.
A powerful piece, Lev. Some of the dialogue feels expository, perhaps some backstory could reduce the need to give reason for ending it via the incident.Actions rather than words. See what you think.
Some strong description of texture and setting. In places the colloquial voice felt at odds with the rather formal description, perhaps keep an eye on that.
This feels like a meeting place, with its musings and the life' philosophies you've nailed. In fact, I thoroughly look forward to reading your work when I see your new posts. This is a really special piece, it has clarity and power with a casual...
I like the inner monologue here, sounds a gorgeous place,there are lots of exclamation marks which lose their impact by the finish, perhaps you could scale back on them a little.Just a thought.
A bold move to blog and I hope it helps many. You have nailed that emotional complexity with clarity and confidence,the cyclical nature of DV being so poorly misunderstood by outsiders and that makes your theoretical introduction to it a more...
This made me long for things in my past, such a stunningly conveyed snatch of lost things just out of reach and an injection of the now always moving us on and out of ourselves. Hypnotic. Lovely to read you again, fb.
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Posted on Fri, 12 Aug 2016
I love this,but feel you repeat the same sounds from verse one to three.Feel it reduces impact. Do say if it is deliberate.
Read full commentPosted in Coffee Moon Haiku Set
A powerful piece, Lev. Some
Posted on Wed, 10 Aug 2016
A powerful piece, Lev. Some of the dialogue feels expository, perhaps some backstory could reduce the need to give reason for ending it via the incident.Actions rather than words. See what you think.
Read full commentPosted in End of the line
Some strong description of
Posted on Sat, 30 Jul 2016
Some strong description of texture and setting. In places the colloquial voice felt at odds with the rather formal description, perhaps keep an eye on that.
Read full commentPosted in A Midsummer Night's Blitz (London)
Vivid, authentic, specific
Posted on Thu, 28 Jul 2016
Vivid, authentic, specific characterisation and your detail is a treat
Read full commentPosted in Strictly, The Last Supper
This feels like a meeting
Posted on Tue, 26 Jul 2016
This feels like a meeting place, with its musings and the life' philosophies you've nailed. In fact, I thoroughly look forward to reading your work when I see your new posts. This is a really special piece, it has clarity and power with a casual...
Read full commentPosted in reflections and miscellany
It feels monumental, looking
Posted on Tue, 05 Jul 2016
It feels monumental, looking out both bodily and visually as though the head is turned inside out. A striking sensation on reading it.
Read full commentPosted in Eriksay
I like the inner monologue
Posted on Tue, 28 Jun 2016
I like the inner monologue here, sounds a gorgeous place,there are lots of exclamation marks which lose their impact by the finish, perhaps you could scale back on them a little.Just a thought.
Read full commentPosted in Torremolinos 2
Sharp description takes you
Posted on Mon, 27 Jun 2016
Sharp description takes you down with it.Gritty derelict brooding.
Read full commentPosted in Berrylands
A bold move to blog and I
Posted on Sat, 25 Jun 2016
A bold move to blog and I hope it helps many. You have nailed that emotional complexity with clarity and confidence,the cyclical nature of DV being so poorly misunderstood by outsiders and that makes your theoretical introduction to it a more...
Read full commentPosted in The First Step
This made me long for things
Posted on Thu, 16 Jun 2016
This made me long for things in my past, such a stunningly conveyed snatch of lost things just out of reach and an injection of the now always moving us on and out of ourselves. Hypnotic. Lovely to read you again, fb.
Read full commentPosted in Gloaming
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