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A celebratory sort of regret.

Posted on Thu, 18 Feb 2016

A celebratory sort of regret. So well paced and minutiae of your original details gives it potency.

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Posted in Anniversary

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Some lush detail here. Felt

Posted on Tue, 16 Feb 2016

Some lush detail here. Felt slightly confused if it was by a river or a sci fi scene, the perspectives seem to shift. 

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Posted in Travel Talks

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In Nottingham there used to

Posted on Tue, 16 Feb 2016

In Nottingham there used to be a street busker, a guy. He played the xylophone. He reminded me of a spider monkey. This raised memories of him somehow. Some soft language here that conveys not only a moment but sounds of nostalgia, 

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Posted in The Lady that Played Piano

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Just come to this one, Airy.

Posted on Sun, 14 Feb 2016

Just come to this one, Airy. Richly detailed, significant things brought to the forefront with confident storytelling. A clear voice.

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Posted in The Net Caster (Part Four)

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I look forward to part two.

Posted on Sun, 14 Feb 2016

I look forward to part two. Lots appealed to me, the short sentences (such a sucker for commas and brevity), very colloquial narrative voice, the deep poison arrows of pain you managed to balance in the trio of betrayal. Well done.

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Posted in Play, You...Play Me

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The house concept coupled

Posted on Thu, 04 Feb 2016

The house concept coupled with the confessional narrator makes for a seemingly light recollection yet each house carries more emotional weight through to that penultimate stanza. Interestingly, I think you can get two very different settings and...

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Posted in My Father's House

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I really like folk tales.

Posted on Tue, 02 Feb 2016

I really like folk tales. This is refreshing, takes you on a trip. The old images have been re worked, too.

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Posted in The Baobab Tree.

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There is a boldness and

Posted on Wed, 27 Jan 2016

There is a boldness and colour here that I really liked. You've captured the verve of your dad by drawing out the quirky things and the comparison with all other dads heightens his unique character. Two small typos:preceding and balloons.

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Posted in Vin

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There is a Mary Poppins feel

Posted on Wed, 27 Jan 2016

There is a Mary Poppins feel to this, Tina. An eclectic arrangement that works very effectively with sound and the imagery, so delicate and pretty.

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Posted in Bird (Poetry Monthly)

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Such satisfying half and full

Posted on Wed, 20 Jan 2016

Such satisfying half and full rhyme here. A stunning paradise and then the close so unsettling with its admission of his untruths. Unusual words give it more Tropicana. Apologies for the brand name, could have said the man from Del Monte....

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Posted in Sarsparilla Dreaming

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