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Deeply moving. It must have
Posted on Thu, 08 Oct 2015
Deeply moving. It must have been painful to write. The time - a true gift - and ways it will be spent precious.Beautifully conveyed.
Beautiful simplicity worked in to this story. Particularly love the lines: cradled her weightless corpse upstairs, undid her dress... It feels very personal as though we are voyeurs to this intimate confession.
A weak child rehabilitating.. Echoes of the sickness that ravaged her immune system still there and the burn conveys how virus / disease feasts on the weakest. A slow burn to the poem - your pauses and breaths used to striking affect. Her...
This is lovely. Warm and thoughtful, full of liberating love, animals unleashed, a sense of the happy go lucky threads through it. I agree with Bear. Your ending would be more resonant without that last apology. But it's just a thought on a minor...
Found this deeply moving. I think it's the simplicity you've opted for. Not that it isn't complex but your colloquial dialogue, those deliberately chosen acts of togetherness don't seem a big deal until that last stanza. You nail that fear and...
I like this. Opening stanza's rhythm sounds like a train on tracks. Is that intentionally worked or magic? I know, I know. Lots of relationship debris and the allusion of violence, hot on many well-cultured heels. Your subject(s) often feels...
Deeply moving. It must have
Posted on Thu, 08 Oct 2015
Deeply moving. It must have been painful to write. The time - a true gift - and ways it will be spent precious.Beautifully conveyed.
Read full commentPosted in “The joy of an Indian summer*”
A Russian Doll journey within
Posted on Wed, 07 Oct 2015
A Russian Doll journey within a journey. Told with such love and bold colour.
Read full commentPosted in Stepping Stones (Poetry Monthly)
Some interesting descriptions
Posted on Tue, 06 Oct 2015
Some interesting descriptions. The formal language is distancing though - seems some grammatical errors in the translation.
Read full commentPosted in Fun Filled Days (Revised)
Beautiful simplicity worked
Posted on Sat, 03 Oct 2015
Beautiful simplicity worked in to this story. Particularly love the lines: cradled her weightless corpse upstairs, undid her dress... It feels very personal as though we are voyeurs to this intimate confession.
Read full commentPosted in Clocking In
Autumn days when the grass is
Posted on Thu, 01 Oct 2015
Autumn days when the grass is jewelled...A gorgeous piece full of the colours of fall and putting summer to bed. Is it meant to be 'silvered.'
Read full commentPosted in Come October
A weak child rehabilitating..
Posted on Sat, 26 Sep 2015
A weak child rehabilitating.. Echoes of the sickness that ravaged her immune system still there and the burn conveys how virus / disease feasts on the weakest. A slow burn to the poem - your pauses and breaths used to striking affect. Her...
Read full commentPosted in Slow Burn
This is lovely. Warm and
Posted on Wed, 23 Sep 2015
This is lovely. Warm and thoughtful, full of liberating love, animals unleashed, a sense of the happy go lucky threads through it. I agree with Bear. Your ending would be more resonant without that last apology. But it's just a thought on a minor...
Read full commentPosted in If you love someone
Found this deeply moving. I
Posted on Tue, 22 Sep 2015
Found this deeply moving. I think it's the simplicity you've opted for. Not that it isn't complex but your colloquial dialogue, those deliberately chosen acts of togetherness don't seem a big deal until that last stanza. You nail that fear and...
Read full commentPosted in 'Mine's a Saveloy!'
The personification of that
Posted on Tue, 22 Sep 2015
The personification of that black dog is really powerful. All that darkness and the confines of the mind well conveyed, here.
Read full commentPosted in Lurker
I like this. Opening stanza's
Posted on Tue, 22 Sep 2015
I like this. Opening stanza's rhythm sounds like a train on tracks. Is that intentionally worked or magic? I know, I know. Lots of relationship debris and the allusion of violence, hot on many well-cultured heels. Your subject(s) often feels...
Read full commentPosted in Kickings from my Sweetheart
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