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324 of my comments have received 329 Great Feedback votes

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Ed, this is really absorbing.

Posted on Thu, 03 Sep 2015

Ed, this is really absorbing. I love the 'phone conversation and the description is quick, moves you along with crisp detail. May I make a suggestion - would it work if you started with 'Number 47 was suffering. The paint had peeled..' It drops...

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Posted in Repo Part 2 (Jason's last Repos)

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This is full of fast pace and

Posted on Thu, 03 Sep 2015

This is full of fast pace and sounds are so real, the dialogue blasts out, it builds up fabulously in sensory overload. Not sure about the ending - the 'dream' ending but is it a dream - feels cliched and I think you might be able to strengthen...

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Posted in Dreamwars #1 Dani and the kermit ship

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Such beautiful language,

Posted on Tue, 01 Sep 2015

Such beautiful language, spins you along with such richness and detail, it feels like a sensory experience just reading it.

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Posted in Relic

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Absolutely loved this. Coming

Posted on Mon, 31 Aug 2015

Absolutely loved this. Coming of age and we’ve all met a Susan. I really felt it – powerful emotional depth and luscious description.

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Posted in Stain

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Tina, this is so fuzzy and

Posted on Tue, 25 Aug 2015

Tina, this is so fuzzy and gorgeous, full of liberating horsey language and a daughter's triumph. Sometimes a poem features lots of words that appeal to the senses and this is one of them.Reminds me of the 'Wild horses I wanna be like you..' song...

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Posted in On my Daughter Learning to Ride

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The expectation of some

Posted on Wed, 26 Aug 2015

The expectation of some clarity and cause is so sharply delivered in this, it's breathtaking when no news comes after such intolerable intrusion. A staggering piece.  Technically, I think your font changes and inner voice are very effective,...

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Posted in Post mortem results

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I adore this piece, Ed. it is

Posted on Fri, 07 Aug 2015

I adore this piece, Ed. it is such a realistic drift - related to it and reminded me of aspects of sleep paralysis, too. The seemingly random and eclectic imagery is so characteristic of falling to sleep for me and bolstered beautifully by the...

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Posted in Falling Asleep

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It's worth is immeasurable.

Posted on Fri, 07 Aug 2015

It's worth is immeasurable. Both the poem and the release. This is exceptionally gutting - hope you dont mind me saying that - there is a privacy between mother and child that the reader is infringing on and it gives the poem more than its beauty...

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Posted in For What it's Worth...

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I love the concept of this -

Posted on Sun, 02 Aug 2015

I love the concept of this - very emotive and sensory detail is sharp. It could be cut and condensed perhaps without diluting the content. It feels surreal in places with a nostalgia of the fair that most children share.

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Posted in Rusted Tracks

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Love your poetry. The

Posted on Sun, 26 Jul 2015

Adore your poetry. The eclectic images strung together - an albino rabbit, packet of Benson's, Becky's skinny thighs, that jukebox makes it so transporting. There's something phenomenally cool about your dirty love songs.

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Posted in (I Don't Want to) Ride the Piss and Graffiti Train Anymore

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