Falling Asleep

Cherry

By Ed Crane

Fri, 07 Aug 2015
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It arrives after a long wait, shapeless

in curtain-down black. At first, empty

thoughtless numbness. Sound-bites

fleet across consciousness; a few bars

of a symphony; a blues riff; a voice

from the past – all immeasurably brief

clues to what is happening. A face drifts

into view, disappears into a sea-scape;

cliffs from childhood; the sound of Dad’s

long-gone laugh. And darkness descends.

Certificate U
Poem

Comments

Submitted by Rhiannonw on

Interesting collage of that state when somehow you are aware that at last you are drifting …
Rhiannon

 

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Submitted by Bee on

So well described the transition. Moving, too - the things that never leave us are caught so real in those precious seconds. 

Gorgeos picture, by the way.

Bee

Submitted by Ed Crane on

During the process of dropping off so many things from the past drift to the surface don't they.

Ed x

(Glad you liked our Beagle doing a "Snoopy")

 

Submitted by Philip Sidney on

Lovely, the structure is like a curtain, drifting back and forth in a breeze, little snatches of memory and the settling.

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Submitted by VeraClark on

I adore this piece, Ed. it is such a realistic drift - related to it and reminded me of aspects of sleep paralysis, too. The seemingly random and eclectic imagery is so characteristic of falling to sleep for me and bolstered beautifully by the frank commentary. 

 

Submitted by Ed Crane on

Thank you very much for your insightful comment

 

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Submitted by scratch on

I agree that this is very good.  I like the movement from conciousness to some other place.  I think that you might want to revise line five which should read 'blues riff'?

 

Submitted by Ed Crane on

and also thanks for the spelling correction. I learn something every day, I really though it was rift, I guess I've been making a fool of myself for many years!

 

Submitted by scratch on

That'd be you and me both then, Ed.

 

Submitted by EB on

Vera has said it all so well. Great how you capture the elusive moments of dropping off.

Submitted by EB on

Vera has said it all so well. Great how you capture the elusive moments of dropping off.

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