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My stories have been read 658800 times and 752 of my stories have been cherry picked.
418 of my 12,034 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 428 votes

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Grimms 80

‘What’s been the crack then?’ Del stands at the front door, a cigarette jammed between his lips. A clean white open-necked shirt sleeves contrast...

the independent cluase

Head filled with different kinds of wrongness rightness and onscreen brightness squared aye by large numbers two points resistance to three points...
Cherry

Grimms 79

Tony’s social worker, Marie, arrives on an official visit. She waits for him in the office. Dayshift-staff circle around, Julie flustered, leaves her...
Cherry

Grimms 78

Fag smoke drifts above Pizza Face’s head. His is a frightened silence amid bickering conversation and accusations of neglect. The last of the sun...
Cherry

Grimms77

Junior hurries home. Tired and hungry, his hair sun-washed and lighter than his brothers’, he finds virtue in manual labour, skin lightly tanned and...

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418 of my comments have received 428 Great Feedback votes

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the rain, the clouds, the cry

Posted on Wed, 20 Aug 2014

the rain, the clouds, the cry of the children, a background noise dripping with melancholy. After the darkness there may be light, but the darkness remanis.

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Posted in After the flood

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hard to get [h]old of

Posted on Thu, 14 Aug 2014

hard to get [h]old of

interesting, but needs split up into paragraphs. bit of a blob the way it's set out and likely to stop people from reading more, which would be a pity.

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Posted in No Man's land

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Don't know why your shorten

Posted on Sun, 10 Aug 2014

Don't know why your shorten until to the more colloquial 'til in the last paragraph, a sudden colluquialism that doesn't quite gell.

Verm imaginative. I couldn't get grey man, but blue man, well, that set the tone.

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Posted in Shredding

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humble and sad, but never bad

Posted on Sat, 09 Aug 2014

humble and sad, but never bad.

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Posted in Mistakes

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I'm excited about what's

Posted on Sun, 03 Aug 2014

I'm excited about what's about to happen too.

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Posted in Out of Control-5

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psalms [palms of hands]

Posted on Sat, 02 Aug 2014

psalms [palms of hands]

type out a candlestick

don;t don't

plenty or rain today and I know how the narrator feels.

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Posted in A late summers day

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Fracking bomb is captialised

Posted on Wed, 30 Jul 2014

Fracking bomb is captialised and uncapitalised. I share many of your concerns.

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Posted in This life is a plastic wrap

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yeh, who can afford to live

Posted on Sat, 12 Jul 2014

yeh, who can afford to live in DC? But you'd need a better imagination to figure house prices in London. 'buy a guy' sounds like an offer and not a preposition.

Oh, the Fab Four, sounds like some obscure band.

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Posted in 17. Do You Believe In Magick?

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start chiselling now lavadis

Posted on Fri, 13 Jun 2014

start chiselling now lavadis

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Posted in Unbounders Away

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not sure what a foofie valve

Posted on Wed, 02 Jul 2014

not sure what a foofie valve is, but the competition is hotting up.

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Posted in Competing - Prologue 2

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