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I return from the newborn

Posted on Sun, 18 Jan 2015

I return from the newborn world and find you have written so much I don't know where to start. Picked this from list with closed eyes and so pleased I did. We are all shoes and we all run out of steam, some shoes I grieve for. Others I take to...

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Posted in Once, We Were Runners

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Some chilling images and your

Posted on Fri, 23 Jan 2015

Some chilling images and your short tempo works well.Seems to change rhythm at "meet" - not sure if it is intentional. It is a really unusual metaphor for the sea, really like it.

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Posted in Full fathom five

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This is stunning. For me it

Posted on Wed, 17 Dec 2014

This is stunning. For me it works as a microscope looking on the past - it magnifies human frailty and the transitory state of life itself in all its agony whilst providing an acute lens on the vulnerability of our natural world too. You distil...

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Posted in Quarter to January

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Lots of your work is very

Posted on Thu, 11 Dec 2014

Lots of your work is very surreal and can have a sense of fragmentation or a momentary interrelational link between its characters. I think the polish on this is good - it's vivid with picturesque scenes you can pin down with your eyes because...

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Posted in Shadow Cooking

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Sharp pull in the opening,

Posted on Sun, 14 Dec 2014

Sharp pull in the opening, engages straight away Lindy.

 

Think it needs more of Ben's personality to come through, more quirks and history of why they've moved - is he popular at new school, is he a content child? Often lonely kids...

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Posted in The Tree House

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Captured the complex emotions

Posted on Sat, 29 Nov 2014

Captured the complex emotions really well, Bee, the resentment and helplessness, the quiet waiting for any sort of end and noticing trivial details in the immediate environment until the noise finally ceases. Crucially, DV is frequently witnessed...

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Posted in Asleep

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What if and what did's

Posted on Fri, 21 Nov 2014

What if and what did's captured with a gutting sharp eye and tenderness.

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Posted in My Mother Myself

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I really liked this. It has

Posted on Thu, 20 Nov 2014

I really liked this. It has an easy distinctive style with lots of detail and no overload. The back story is intriguing and the way you've incorporated history into it is imaginative. 

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Posted in The Lady In Red: A Ghost Story

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Hello Crumpet, I like this.

Posted on Sun, 16 Nov 2014

Hello Crumpet, I like this. Absorbing with a very entertaining narrative voice. That line where Hav hits with the mushroom knife feels it needs bulking out - such a significant event if he stops moving. Just a minor point but needs a little more...

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Posted in Himmel's Fantastical Non-Adventure

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I like the tribe metaphor and

Posted on Fri, 14 Nov 2014

I like the tribe metaphor and the use of 'the other' to convey the creature. That he/she impersonates animal calls but still doesn't get recognised feels key to his/her self-perception, there's an assumption that all the others are united but...

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Posted in Living on the edges

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