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What if and what did's
Posted on Fri, 21 Nov 2014
What if and what did's captured with a gutting sharp eye and tenderness.
I really liked this. It has an easy distinctive style with lots of detail and no overload. The back story is intriguing and the way you've incorporated history into it is imaginative.
Hello Crumpet, I like this. Absorbing with a very entertaining narrative voice. That line where Hav hits with the mushroom knife feels it needs bulking out - such a significant event if he stops moving. Just a minor point but needs a little more...
I like the tribe metaphor and the use of 'the other' to convey the creature. That he/she impersonates animal calls but still doesn't get recognised feels key to his/her self-perception, there's an assumption that all the others are united but...
Not sure about nothingness - surely it's a preconceived stereotype about what 'an other' (petit bourgeoise ) thinks and speaks of. Who validates that it is what it is?
Sounds like the female should rely on nobody and have no needs at all whilst men can have children all over the world with no financial or parental responsibility simply because they're not the vehicle. Females don't get children without blokes...
Hi Michael, welcome to ABC Tales. Shout if you;re unsure of how the site works, a very friendly bunch of people. There's lots to like in your first post - very descriptive, the castle metaphor is unexpectedly vivid and fitting. They are the pits...
I've just finished Vanessa Gebbie's 'Storm Warning' and a short story featuring soup parallels with this. Eclectic images in fish lens detail make very vivid poetry, particularly colour.This is a fine example of ambiguity making your reader...
What if and what did's
Posted on Fri, 21 Nov 2014
What if and what did's captured with a gutting sharp eye and tenderness.
Read full commentPosted in My Mother Myself
I really liked this. It has
Posted on Thu, 20 Nov 2014
I really liked this. It has an easy distinctive style with lots of detail and no overload. The back story is intriguing and the way you've incorporated history into it is imaginative.
Read full commentPosted in The Lady In Red: A Ghost Story
Hello Crumpet, I like this.
Posted on Sun, 16 Nov 2014
Hello Crumpet, I like this. Absorbing with a very entertaining narrative voice. That line where Hav hits with the mushroom knife feels it needs bulking out - such a significant event if he stops moving. Just a minor point but needs a little more...
Read full commentPosted in Himmel's Fantastical Non-Adventure
I like the tribe metaphor and
Posted on Fri, 14 Nov 2014
I like the tribe metaphor and the use of 'the other' to convey the creature. That he/she impersonates animal calls but still doesn't get recognised feels key to his/her self-perception, there's an assumption that all the others are united but...
Read full commentPosted in Living on the edges
Not sure about nothingness -
Posted on Fri, 14 Nov 2014
Not sure about nothingness - surely it's a preconceived stereotype about what 'an other' (petit bourgeoise ) thinks and speaks of. Who validates that it is what it is?
Read full commentPosted in political correctness 1
Sounds like the female should
Posted on Thu, 13 Nov 2014
Sounds like the female should rely on nobody and have no needs at all whilst men can have children all over the world with no financial or parental responsibility simply because they're not the vehicle. Females don't get children without blokes...
Read full commentPosted in Man Vs. Child
Hi Michael, welcome to ABC
Posted on Tue, 11 Nov 2014
Hi Michael, welcome to ABC Tales. Shout if you;re unsure of how the site works, a very friendly bunch of people. There's lots to like in your first post - very descriptive, the castle metaphor is unexpectedly vivid and fitting. They are the pits...
Read full commentPosted in The Public Toilet
A beautifully conveyed scene
Posted on Sun, 09 Nov 2014
A beautifully conveyed scene of the totally surreal.
Read full commentPosted in Collecting Samples
I've just finished Vanessa
Posted on Fri, 31 Oct 2014
I've just finished Vanessa Gebbie's 'Storm Warning' and a short story featuring soup parallels with this. Eclectic images in fish lens detail make very vivid poetry, particularly colour.This is a fine example of ambiguity making your reader...
Read full commentPosted in 'Poppies in the Snow'
Is this for Movember? Your
Posted on Sun, 02 Nov 2014
Is this for Movember? Your work never fails to make me laugh. Amusing but there's always an undercurrent to unpack.
Read full commentPosted in Facial
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