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A lovely intro, its
Posted on Mon, 08 Sep 2014
A lovely intro Lindy, its independent swagger works for me. Consider adding an adjective before 'up to the imposing front door' to clarify that sentence. I'd use 'trickled' but lots would fit.
Whose favourite? Give 'her' a name so that the...
Read full commentPosted in A difference of Opinion
A real fan of your work. You
Posted on Fri, 05 Sep 2014
A real fan of your work. You are very skilled at translating mental health for both those in the know and those that are not, who need showing to gain a perspective of what schizophrenia may mean.
connection missing a 'c'.
This...
Read full commentPosted in The Science of Fiction
This is enjoyable darkness
Posted on Sun, 07 Sep 2014
This is enjoyable darkness Phillip, not too heavy on the emotion with macabre elements that make it very unusual. Agree about cutting the top two. If you start at 'Then there were' - you don't need to introduce the magic lantern because the poem...
Read full commentPosted in Magic Lantern
It isn't easy to capture the
Posted on Mon, 01 Sep 2014
It isn't easy to capture the 'projection' mentality of a perpertrater of DV minimising his actions to his victim but you've got that hateful little voice down really well. I don't like this narrator because I recognise lots of infuriating men's...
Read full commentPosted in SMACK - (edited)
Love this Parson, its
Posted on Sun, 24 Aug 2014
Love this Parson, its strength is in your reader not knowing and that ambivalence lends such possibility. That it is sea bound gave me a shiver, too many unknowns out there. The statemented style brings impact and your visuals are sharp. It...
Read full commentPosted in Event
‘That retro-folk-doggerel
Posted on Wed, 20 Aug 2014
‘That retro-folk-doggerel you recite to people—well, it’s like being fucked up the arse by a nose trumpet,’ is my favourite line.
Adore the symbolic wing trapped in a net, the brilliance dazzling behind concrete walls, the Panopticon of...
Read full commentPosted in The Avondale Ward
What a heart burner of a
Posted on Wed, 20 Aug 2014
What a heart burner of a piece. It's full of love and yet just out of reach.
Read full commentPosted in The day before December 30th
The box kite's crucial to me
Posted on Mon, 18 Aug 2014
The box kite's crucial to me in this because it isn't just a box kite. It's ether and touch, a link between child and parent, a sky offering and a floating away. This poem has had a hefty impact on me. That's as much as I can say. It has...
Read full commentPosted in Present Imperfect
It is another man's treasure.
Posted on Fri, 15 Aug 2014
It is another man's treasure. Often think the same of kid's strange collections. This is stunning, the care in the words makes him as precious as his newsprint.
Read full commentPosted in Another Man's Treasure
This is gorgeously tragic.
Posted on Mon, 11 Aug 2014
This is gorgeously tragic. The sea shells don't help her, do they, for all they've heard. Adore it's ambiguity, how you can tell your own story from it. 'room full of fresh air' is my favourite line, the emptiness swallows you.
Read full commentPosted in Secrets and Seashells
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