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A forever relationship is as
Posted on Fri, 02 May 2014
A forever relationship is as fitting as a comfy chair and the luxury of a night dress at noon and an artist that knows beauty isn't youth but compassion. Stunning.
I always fondly jest my partner for bringing uncool cumbersome flasks of...
This shimmers Kafka yet it's original, too. Full of metallic-breathed anxiety and wet underarms, of shrinking, the brain pacing out inadequacy, being forced to take up less space in a world of space-abusers and big nosed people that believe,...
Mandy, the mushroom imagery and the darkness of the forest grabbed me straight away. I was expecting the spore imagery to spread to Liam somehow - an ex boyfriend of mine reminded me of a mushroom. My only gripe is I wanted more.
An unexpected piece of work, the language is rich and textured, the ending felt washed through and clean despite the carnage. The fragmentation and the flitting pace strengthens her character, it shows how unstable she is. Or perhaps I should...
'The one' is hundreds of children I've known and worked with. You've got a rein on this, but you still select the most innocent action to receive retribution - clapping too soon and that's abuse enough to sink your reader. Haunting stuff.
There's no unemotional way to comment on this because it broke me. Deeply upset me. It's very considered - more so for its impact perhaps and the subject matter of loss - but I found myself scanning, almost rejecting the scenic lines to get to...
Hello Elie, your dialogue's good and it's a very accessible style of writing. Realise I'm jumping in at 5 but wasn't sure how old they were - obviously at college - but they seemed to speak much older than 17 at times? It may help to clarify age...
A forever relationship is as
Posted on Fri, 02 May 2014
A forever relationship is as fitting as a comfy chair and the luxury of a night dress at noon and an artist that knows beauty isn't youth but compassion. Stunning.
I always fondly jest my partner for bringing uncool cumbersome flasks of...
Read full commentPosted in The Blue Chair
Our society's a dystopian
Posted on Sat, 26 Apr 2014
Our society's a dystopian nightmare, this is precisely why. You've stapled it all down and the anonymity of Z hammered it home harder.
Read full commentPosted in Cadogan Street
This is beautiful, you make
Posted on Wed, 23 Apr 2014
This is beautiful, you make natural miracles so special to read about.
Read full commentPosted in Frog Spring (2)
This shimmers Kafka yet it's
Posted on Tue, 08 Apr 2014
This shimmers Kafka yet it's original, too. Full of metallic-breathed anxiety and wet underarms, of shrinking, the brain pacing out inadequacy, being forced to take up less space in a world of space-abusers and big nosed people that believe,...
Read full commentPosted in The Dinner Party
Mandy, the mushroom imagery
Posted on Fri, 11 Apr 2014
Mandy, the mushroom imagery and the darkness of the forest grabbed me straight away. I was expecting the spore imagery to spread to Liam somehow - an ex boyfriend of mine reminded me of a mushroom. My only gripe is I wanted more.
Read full commentPosted in Families are like fungus
An unexpected piece of work,
Posted on Wed, 09 Apr 2014
An unexpected piece of work, the language is rich and textured, the ending felt washed through and clean despite the carnage. The fragmentation and the flitting pace strengthens her character, it shows how unstable she is. Or perhaps I should...
Read full commentPosted in Knit One Slip One Part 3
Butterflies are all manner of
Posted on Fri, 04 Apr 2014
Butterflies are all manner of things to me. Signs and meanings and people and ghosts. The layers are delicate yet very poignant.
Read full commentPosted in Marginalia
'The one' is hundreds of
Posted on Tue, 01 Apr 2014
'The one' is hundreds of children I've known and worked with. You've got a rein on this, but you still select the most innocent action to receive retribution - clapping too soon and that's abuse enough to sink your reader. Haunting stuff.
Read full commentPosted in The One...
There's no unemotional way to
Posted on Tue, 01 Apr 2014
There's no unemotional way to comment on this because it broke me. Deeply upset me. It's very considered - more so for its impact perhaps and the subject matter of loss - but I found myself scanning, almost rejecting the scenic lines to get to...
Read full commentPosted in Mynydd Carningli (for TP's parents)
Hello Elie, your dialogue's
Posted on Tue, 01 Apr 2014
Hello Elie, your dialogue's good and it's a very accessible style of writing. Realise I'm jumping in at 5 but wasn't sure how old they were - obviously at college - but they seemed to speak much older than 17 at times? It may help to clarify age...
Read full commentPosted in Gifts That Cost Your Soul 5
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