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What a fizzy, light poem with

Posted on Tue, 21 Jan 2014

What a fizzy, light poem with some deceptive teasing.

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Posted in Letter to a friend

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It's a little distracting

Posted on Wed, 22 Jan 2014

It's a little distracting with a chapter break in the middle. May read more seamlessly starting that in a new piece.Realise it's near the end, fast paced and good dialogue.

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Posted in Carruthers' Demise, Final Chapters

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This is a strong idea and

Posted on Wed, 22 Jan 2014

This is a strong idea and imaginatively conveyed. This line feels as though it should be linked with the preceding line with a comma, rather than being a stand alone statement:

 As though charged with protecting a town from plague.

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Posted in An idea on the premature death of ideas.

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Intiriguing theme and liked

Posted on Sat, 18 Jan 2014

Intiriguing theme and liked the natural dialogue between Nina and Simon. Perhaps consider editing the over-use of 'she' throughout? I'm assuming you've incorporated it in that style to represent building panic, but I found the repetition got in...

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Posted in Panic

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Your language is blinding,

Posted on Tue, 14 Jan 2014

Your language is blinding, blade sharp and startlingly original. An absolute pleasure to read over and over until laughter threatens to throttle you at that albino rabbit on blue wheels, then the power of the last stanza straightens your face up...

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Posted in Her 64th boyfriend

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Heartwarming tale. The

Posted on Sun, 05 Jan 2014

Heartwarming tale. The dialogue is really animated and real.

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Posted in Compassion

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 Beyond the obvious beauty of

Posted on Wed, 01 Jan 2014

 Beyond the obvious beauty of this piece, in trying to comprehend and contextualise pain I simply can't, I was thinking about how powerfully you sustain your daughter's memory in your own code as a matter of course. You make sure that your...

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Posted in Six Years On...

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Really liked the concept of

Posted on Fri, 13 Dec 2013

Really liked the concept of this story. Can imagine it happening with all the mobile technology.

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Posted in Mischief

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This is absolutely lovely.

Posted on Sat, 07 Dec 2013

This is absolutely lovely.

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Posted in From here to there

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dazza, that eternal wait for

Posted on Mon, 02 Dec 2013

dazza, that eternal wait for the bus, know it well. Liked the conversational tone of this, it sways this way and that. Centre alignment works well. Needs a spell check. 

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Posted in The second of December twenty thirteen

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