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This feels so tender and real
Posted on Thu, 13 Feb 2014
This feels so tender and real, the characters are vividly drawn with such care. Looking forward to more.
Read full commentPosted in Grandad's Party - Chapter 1 of 3
Hello, more to chew on here.
Posted on Wed, 05 Feb 2014
Hello, more to chew on here. Gruesome stuff. Grrrh, I think I'd be tempted to start at 'I must've been studying her for weeks' because it starts straight at the point of intrigue. Keep going!
Read full commentPosted in Souvenir (part 2 of ?) [considerably longer than the last part..]
Yes, some lovely descriptions
Posted on Sat, 01 Feb 2014
Yes, some lovely descriptions in this.Would love to read more.There's a deep consideration of language which makes the stillness intense.
Read full commentPosted in Memoirs Of Desolation
The way your character zones
Posted on Thu, 30 Jan 2014
The way your character zones in on minutaie in the shower is good, lots of fine detail, her inner monologue draws you in. Only bit I wasn't sure about was the pouffe string, it trivialises the seriousness of the mood somewhat. The cutting end is...
Read full commentPosted in Seven-Eighths
What a fizzy, light poem with
Posted on Tue, 21 Jan 2014
What a fizzy, light poem with some deceptive teasing.
Read full commentPosted in Letter to a friend
It's a little distracting
Posted on Wed, 22 Jan 2014
It's a little distracting with a chapter break in the middle. May read more seamlessly starting that in a new piece.Realise it's near the end, fast paced and good dialogue.
Read full commentPosted in Carruthers' Demise, Final Chapters
This is a strong idea and
Posted on Wed, 22 Jan 2014
This is a strong idea and imaginatively conveyed. This line feels as though it should be linked with the preceding line with a comma, rather than being a stand alone statement:
As though charged with protecting a town from plague.
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Read full commentPosted in An idea on the premature death of ideas.
Intiriguing theme and liked
Posted on Sat, 18 Jan 2014
Intiriguing theme and liked the natural dialogue between Nina and Simon. Perhaps consider editing the over-use of 'she' throughout? I'm assuming you've incorporated it in that style to represent building panic, but I found the repetition got in...
Read full commentPosted in Panic
Your language is blinding,
Posted on Tue, 14 Jan 2014
Your language is blinding, blade sharp and startlingly original. An absolute pleasure to read over and over until laughter threatens to throttle you at that albino rabbit on blue wheels, then the power of the last stanza straightens your face up...
Read full commentPosted in Her 64th boyfriend
Heartwarming tale. The
Posted on Sun, 05 Jan 2014
Heartwarming tale. The dialogue is really animated and real.
Read full commentPosted in Compassion
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