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The box kite's crucial to me
Posted on Mon, 18 Aug 2014
The box kite's crucial to me in this because it isn't just a box kite. It's ether and touch, a link between child and parent, a sky offering and a floating away. This poem has had a hefty impact on me. That's as much as I can say. It has...
Read full commentPosted in Present Imperfect
It is another man's treasure.
Posted on Fri, 15 Aug 2014
It is another man's treasure. Often think the same of kid's strange collections. This is stunning, the care in the words makes him as precious as his newsprint.
Read full commentPosted in Another Man's Treasure
This is gorgeously tragic.
Posted on Mon, 11 Aug 2014
This is gorgeously tragic. The sea shells don't help her, do they, for all they've heard. Adore it's ambiguity, how you can tell your own story from it. 'room full of fresh air' is my favourite line, the emptiness swallows you.
Read full commentPosted in Secrets and Seashells
The emotional drainage is
Posted on Wed, 20 Aug 2014
The emotional drainage is well conveyed Phillip, your clipped sentences work well to unbutton this interaction down to bare bones. The only distraction for me is the capitalisation on every line. Know it's a style preference but I often get...
Read full commentPosted in Dirty Lucre
It's inventive and thoughtful
Posted on Tue, 19 Aug 2014
She's inventive and colourful with a tang of Cockney fun. Just like an autumn tart should be.
Read full commentPosted in Apples, Pears and Treacle Tart (I.P)
Really enjoyed this, Phillip.
Posted on Sat, 02 Aug 2014
Really enjoyed this, Phillip. There's a slow burn pace to your narrative and lots of internal considerations which gives depth to your piece.
Perhaps you could move your opening line lower down into the prose? The metaphorical...
Read full commentPosted in Ash
Much of my life feels like
Posted on Fri, 25 Jul 2014
Much of my life feels like this when I look back. This appealed to me at a personal level, beyond that, the environmental images are gritty, with their own emotional intensity and a certain sort of happy go luckiness that brings it to a chamring...
Read full commentPosted in By The Lake Of Banky Water I Sat Down Where The Grass No Longer Grows
A vision of self-love and
Posted on Sat, 19 Jul 2014
A vision of self-love and synchronicity beautifully captured, Edithrose.
Read full commentPosted in Reflection in you
This is superb Bee, I think
Posted on Mon, 07 Jul 2014
This is superb Bee, I think you can interpret it seriously or with some humour, too. Depends which type of poetic mood oe;'s Worzel Gummidge head has at the onset. I got a sense of tongue in cheek, but irregardless, the words are spot on and give...
Read full commentPosted in Once I Was A Poet
Sorraya, a disturbing tale of
Posted on Sat, 28 Jun 2014
Sorraya, a disturbing tale of murder. Like the direct storytelling style, I think it could end more powerfully on 'No one seems to notice me.' That last paragraph dilutes it some, it could be cut and end with more mystery. Hope you don't mind my...
Read full commentPosted in Kaitlin
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