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Gosh, not an easy task with
Posted on Fri, 26 Sep 2014
Gosh, not an easy task with all those conditions. With restraint, as they say.
Lindy, I'm a serial starter and finish over months in dribs. You can come back to this if it doesn't feel right now - sometimes takes me a year for a 3, 000 word story to settle or solidify before I can even spit it out. Hope you know what I'm...
Very touching and really felt the brick metaphor, particularly liked how it became a feature of friendship and mere concrete became environmental struggle as well as final struggle.
Yes, got me in the heart. Its light touch softens it, but a touch of heavy's allowed. Parental attachment is an emotional abcess and a source of identification that defies all other bonds.
Hello Broamalia, this is going well and your description is really considered.Perhaps consider giving the old woman and boy a name so that there isn't too much anonymity along the way.
Hi Stephen, you've asked for some feedback - just had a read through your piece. Welcome to ABC firstly. There are some lovely poetic qualities to your prose, particularly the last two paragraphs. The little girl is intriguing and I want to know...
Intriguing characters and the dialogue pulls your reader in. You could open with 'She bent to retrieve' and tag your other paragraphs onto the close of last chapter. Keep going.
Laughed wildly at this. It's absolute truth and your characters are all so real on the page. Never give your ideas away and erm, polite cough-cough, never knock Virginia Woolf. (She's a babe)
Fleshly is fab! This is very resonating - something you don't like to mull over because it grows in stature and it's composed as starkly as industry is.
Gosh, not an easy task with
Posted on Fri, 26 Sep 2014
Gosh, not an easy task with all those conditions. With restraint, as they say.
Read full commentPosted in I Can Do What I Want!
Lindy, I'm a serial starter
Posted on Thu, 25 Sep 2014
Lindy, I'm a serial starter and finish over months in dribs. You can come back to this if it doesn't feel right now - sometimes takes me a year for a 3, 000 word story to settle or solidify before I can even spit it out. Hope you know what I'm...
Read full commentPosted in Another World
Very touching and really felt
Posted on Thu, 25 Sep 2014
Very touching and really felt the brick metaphor, particularly liked how it became a feature of friendship and mere concrete became environmental struggle as well as final struggle.
Read full commentPosted in BRICKS
Yes, got me in the heart. Its
Posted on Wed, 17 Sep 2014
Yes, got me in the heart. Its light touch softens it, but a touch of heavy's allowed. Parental attachment is an emotional abcess and a source of identification that defies all other bonds.
Read full commentPosted in When I Am The Apple of No One's Eye
Hello Broamalia, this is
Posted on Thu, 18 Sep 2014
Hello Broamalia, this is going well and your description is really considered.Perhaps consider giving the old woman and boy a name so that there isn't too much anonymity along the way.
'leapt' in the last line.
Read full commentPosted in Progeniture, Ch. 4
Hi Stephen, you've asked for
Posted on Wed, 17 Sep 2014
Hi Stephen, you've asked for some feedback - just had a read through your piece. Welcome to ABC firstly. There are some lovely poetic qualities to your prose, particularly the last two paragraphs. The little girl is intriguing and I want to know...
Read full commentPosted in Journey
Intriguing characters and the
Posted on Tue, 16 Sep 2014
Intriguing characters and the dialogue pulls your reader in. You could open with 'She bent to retrieve' and tag your other paragraphs onto the close of last chapter. Keep going.
Read full commentPosted in Progeniture, Ch. 3
Laughed wildly at this. It's
Posted on Sat, 13 Sep 2014
Laughed wildly at this. It's absolute truth and your characters are all so real on the page. Never give your ideas away and erm, polite cough-cough, never knock Virginia Woolf. (She's a babe)
Read full commentPosted in I have no sympathy
Fleshly is fab! This is very
Posted on Thu, 11 Sep 2014
Fleshly is fab! This is very resonating - something you don't like to mull over because it grows in stature and it's composed as starkly as industry is.
Read full commentPosted in Saltley Gas Works (Necropolis)
Lots to like. Cuttingly
Posted on Sun, 07 Sep 2014
Lots to like. Cuttingly satisfying. I admire your no nonsense style and it's witty to boot.
Read full commentPosted in Stacey on the Lunch
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