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'The one' is hundreds of
Posted on Tue, 01 Apr 2014
'The one' is hundreds of children I've known and worked with. You've got a rein on this, but you still select the most innocent action to receive retribution - clapping too soon and that's abuse enough to sink your reader. Haunting stuff.
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There's no unemotional way to
Posted on Tue, 01 Apr 2014
There's no unemotional way to comment on this because it broke me. Deeply upset me. It's very considered - more so for its impact perhaps and the subject matter of loss - but I found myself scanning, almost rejecting the scenic lines to get to...
Read full commentPosted in Mynydd Carningli (for TP's parents)
Hello Elie, your dialogue's
Posted on Tue, 01 Apr 2014
Hello Elie, your dialogue's good and it's a very accessible style of writing. Realise I'm jumping in at 5 but wasn't sure how old they were - obviously at college - but they seemed to speak much older than 17 at times? It may help to clarify age...
Read full commentPosted in Gifts That Cost Your Soul 5
'I quite like their strip'
Posted on Mon, 31 Mar 2014
'I quite like their strip' made me laugh.' He's so likeable despite the question marks that hang over his heid. Your dialogue's as natural as the tea they're drinking. I'm fascinated with how you've drawn this to a close without signing any...
Read full commentPosted in school photos 71
Ooh, so there are decent
Posted on Fri, 14 Mar 2014
Ooh, so there are decent celebs in the world. A great story and told in a charming way.
Read full commentPosted in ONE GOOD TURN
You've given me a tremendous
Posted on Fri, 14 Mar 2014
You've given me a tremendous laugh and funny or not, there's a real injection of suffering in there, too. This is fabulous and would love to hear it performed.
Read full commentPosted in Shorty
Really liked the description
Posted on Wed, 12 Mar 2014
Really liked the description in this, could see it all, very well-drawn, Neil. Wasn't sure about soporific in the opening line - mainly because I had to google it. Have changed my mind now - it fits well. A good chapter.
Read full commentPosted in Surface Tension - Chapter 20
This is vivid and
Posted on Sat, 22 Feb 2014
This is vivid and transporting with its hint of darkness. Really enjoyed.
Read full commentPosted in That Field
Loved this. A healthy dose of
Posted on Thu, 20 Feb 2014
Loved this. A healthy dose of sense-making nonsense with a splash of slapstick.
Read full commentPosted in Sar-chasm
Really liked this MrChapper
Posted on Mon, 17 Feb 2014
Really liked this MrChapper Engaging from the opening. The gift itself is incredibly sad and your references to time slipping away, then the elderly parent's house upkeep gives a strong message. It's a universal story because we all face it or...
Read full commentPosted in The Waiting Room
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