Jon McBaker

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StoryThe Road to Nowhere Special - Chapter V (Part II of II) J. A. Stapleton29 years 9 months ago
StoryThe Road to Nowhere Special - Chapter V (Part I of II) J. A. Stapleton29 years 9 months ago
StoryThe Road to Nowhere Special - Chapter II J. A. Stapleton29 years 9 months ago
CollectionSidewards Jon McBaker09 years 9 months ago
CollectionThe Genesis People Jon McBaker09 years 11 months ago
CollectionFledgling Wings Jon McBaker09 years 11 months ago
StoryJustice Jon McBaker310 years 1 month ago
StoryThe Room Jon McBaker110 years 3 months ago
StoryCat Taljov the Fifth's First Heist Jon McBaker110 years 4 months ago
StoryFledgling Wings: Chapters 4 & 5 Jon McBaker010 years 4 months ago
StoryFledgling Wings: Chapter 3 Jon McBaker210 years 4 months ago
StoryFledgling Wings: Chapters 1 & 2 Jon McBaker010 years 4 months ago
StorySecond Diary Entry (No.13) J. A. Stapleton410 years 4 months ago
StoryThe Genesis People - Chapters 1 & 2 Jon McBaker110 years 4 months ago
StoryThe Genesis People - Chapter5 Jon McBaker010 years 4 months ago
StoryThe Genesis People - Chapters 3 & 4 Jon McBaker010 years 4 months ago

My stories

Justice

This is a story I came up while thinking of a scene for a book I'm writing. However, after going through it so many times, acting out dialogue and tone of voice, I soon realised that this would be a good standalone short story. I feel that this is just as good as The Room (hopefully).

Cat Taljov the Fifth's First Heist

This is a short story I wrote in my first year and semester of University a year ago. My tutor at the time did not like science-fiction and fantasy, so we were told not to write any...which is a problem for those who specialise in writing that kind of fiction. Resultantly, I had to write a more dramatic/down-to-earth story, which I don't normally write, so I went with a kind of thriller. Because I had to go with a word count between 1800-2050 words, this may feel rushed to some of you, as it kind of does with me. The plot concerns a young Hungarian woman who is the latest generation of a line of cat burglars who all went under the name Cat Taljov. Having spent years training with her mother on how to be the fifth Cat Taljov, she must now prove her worth.

Fledgling Wings: Chapters 4 & 5

Here are Chapters 4 and 5 of 'Fledgling Wings' (early work from 2009-2010). Here, our protagonist John, now on his brother's ship, confronts him once again, and another fight ensues. Meanwhile, a wanderer in a far-away wasteland meets hostility.

Fledgling Wings: Chapter 3

Chapter Three of 'Fledgling Wings', which is much longer than its predecessors. On its Word Document it covers about seven pages, and I think it helps exemplify the problems with the story - rushed in action, character thoughts + decisions and plot, with no sense of taking things slow half the time. Everything you see is as I left it upon completion.

Fledgling Wings: Chapters 1 & 2

The first two chapters of a finished but unpublished novella I wrote between 2009 and 2010. Because I was only roughly 14-15 at the time of writing it, and being very new to writing prose (beforehand I wrote three short stories) it has a lot of shortcomings (rushed story, characters only appearing in one chapter). I realised this soon after reading through it. Thankfully my writing has improved over the years to a much more competent level. *Additionally, I've changed the title for this, as the original one was nonsensical: 'Space Emission'. Why did I go for that name? Bugger if I know.

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Nice Work

Posted on Mon, 19 Jan 2015

  • I like the description of the Chicago Confetti Club, as well as the paragraph preceding it since it shows how disgusting the city is.
  • The writing style fits perfectly with the noire genre. Good job.
  • "...but thought the
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Seems Alright

Posted on Mon, 29 Dec 2014

I find this story to be okay - the Japanese soldier bit was good, but the paragraph structure is one of the problems with this, alongside a moment or two of sentence-structure problems. I'm no stranger to one-sentence paragraphs (having used them...

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