Bethan Hall

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I have 4 stories published in 0 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 2024 times and one story has been cherrypicked.
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Hello, Bookworm.

(Hey there! This is a writing experiment of mine in getting the reader attached to the narrator so if you are beautiful enough of a person to leave...

Two Minutes to Midnight - Test Chapter (church)

( Just for quick context : Hey there! this is a quick section of a novel I'm trying to peice together and want to know what works and what doesn't so...

Two Minutes to Midnight - Test Chapter

(Just for quick context: Hello! This is just a quick chapter I wanted to take place in the middle of the novel I'm writing between two of the main...
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Two Minutes to Midnight - Opening Chapter

A friend of mine once told me a schoolyard legend that would grow with each passing season. The legend of a man of the forest; as quick as the wind...

3 of my comments have received 4 Great Feedback votes

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Posted on Tue, 21 Jul 2015

Hey smiley glad I got to read the rest of it so soon. The two major points I would...

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Posted in Book of Lain (completed prologue) unedited

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Posted on Sat, 27 Jun 2015

The irony you use in the title is a great idea but what I'd do is shorten it to just "Self-inflicted optimism" ...

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Posted in A Kind of Self-Inflicted Pain: Optimism

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I love minimalist juxtaposing

Posted on Fri, 06 Feb 2015

I love minimalist juxtaposing imagery like the opening of this, it's really impactful ...

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Posted in Everything was Blue and Green