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I like the ideas, the use of

Posted on Tue, 20 Aug 2019

I like the ideas, the use of speech and the effort of your rhymes. You hint at the father being difficult, ‘taunting’, but don’t reveal enough perhaps here for me? I guess I think you could base it more on this? What are you trying to tell / say...

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Posted in the zoo

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These are very sweet and nice

Posted on Mon, 19 Aug 2019

These are very sweet and nice to hear you reading them. You have captured childish states well with these, I think. :)

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Posted in KidsSpeak

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This is a lovely, delicate

Posted on Thu, 15 Aug 2019

This is a lovely, delicate poem. Like a leaf of a poem actually with its hint of darkness too.  I loved, ‘breathe leaf breath’ and the threatening wind. 

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Posted in airmail from the amazon (august 2018)

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This is very lovely. I like

Posted on Wed, 14 Aug 2019

This is very lovely. I like your use of emphasis, but all wonderful.

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Posted in prairie river flowing

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Rhiannon, these are so good.

Posted on Mon, 12 Aug 2019

Rhiannon, these are so good. I have been popping back to read them in turn. Though I enjoyed hearing your Welsh accent too - which is poetic in itself, I think. April and December are my favourites - perhaps for what they describe as much as your...

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Posted in Through the year month by month

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Such an interesting piece of

Posted on Tue, 13 Aug 2019

Such an interesting piece of writing about memory. Enjoyed it very much. Made me think of synapses as light or stars. Lovely. 

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Posted in Remembering

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Aha, so this is the lost ID

Posted on Thu, 01 Aug 2019

Aha, so this is the lost ID poem! It's very good indeed and as Rhiannon says above, neatly done. Also I missed passports on my long list of things that would have my name on! (I might edit to see if I can squeeze passports in!) I remember this...

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Posted in Stateless in New York

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So lovely. Some very

Posted on Sun, 28 Jul 2019

So lovely. Some very beautiful lines. 

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Posted in grass/july

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Thanks David. Just the

Posted on Fri, 26 Jul 2019

Thanks David. Just the thought of Boris Johnson gives me a shudder. It would be nice to think though, wouldn’t it, that we could all embrace more of our humanity. Thanks for reading my poem and leaving such a thoughtful comment. 

 

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Posted in I am not a statistic

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This has so many sublime

Posted on Wed, 03 Jul 2019

This has so many sublime lines, imagery and metaphor. Such an excellent piece of writing. 

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Posted in A Man Riding the Tube Train

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