Jewel Serpent

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I have 21 stories published in 0 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 11250 times and 24 of my stories have been cherry picked.
7 of my 132 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 9 votes

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In love with life

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The Nightmare

The nightmare began on Friday evening. It began when William said he wanted Isabelle to go with him, to a work dinner, to meet a man called Mr...
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A Little Longer

“Are you getting off, or not?” I look up to see the driver staring at me. “Yes, thanks.” I pick up my briefcase, ignoring the pain in my arm, and get...
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Seven Things

When I told my mother I liked girls, she smiled She told me it was a phase She told me it was only natural To want to be a man The second time I told...
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Bernard Shaw

The first time Bernard saw his ruination, it looked completely ordinary. It walked into his fourth-period class wearing the school uniform. The skirt...
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7 of my comments have received 9 Great Feedback votes

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God bless, Bee. I don't know

Posted on Mon, 25 Apr 2016

God bless, Bee. I don't know too much about life, I have not lived long. But I do know that sometimes we meet people along the way who brighten the journey,even if we have no idea who they are.

Like you.

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Posted in Bee's Journey - (the last leg)

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This is a wondeful poem.

Posted on Thu, 20 Feb 2014

This is a wondeful poem. Despite the increased risks of falling into the much despised trap of cliche, you hold your own against the words (if that even makes sense, since you're kind of on the same side lol!) and that's what makes this piece...

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Posted in Flood

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"You are scared of"....

Posted on Fri, 29 Jan 2016

"You are scared of"....

The first line pretty much sums up life in my opinion! A list of things we fear. The more trivial things that he fears really does reflect real life:)

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Posted in You got the jitters

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Such a powerful piece of art.

Posted on Sat, 30 Jan 2016

Such a powerful piece of art. You've essentially taken apart and beautifed each component of writing in  such a rich way. This was truly a pleasure to read. 

Just a thought—did you mean to use both 'ambiguous' and 'unambiguous'? Maybe if...

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Posted in Grave news

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I didn't think this was awful

Posted on Tue, 26 Jan 2016

I didn't think this was awful at all! On the contrary, it made me feel that little thrill of envy that I feel every so often while reading other people's poetry:)

"You matter, and we matter". I really liked this. It really pitches that...

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Posted in Paean

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Wow this is so bloody good!!

Posted on Tue, 11 Mar 2014

Wow this is so bloody good!! I have nothing left to say. I mean, I was thinking all this stuff while I was reading it but um...now all I can think is AMAZING. 

This story has so many things going on! And yet his story is told with the...

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Posted in Chestnut Mare

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I agree with scratch, and by

Posted on Thu, 30 Jan 2014

I agree with scratch, and by the looks of it you do comment quite a lot! I'm sure I haven't paid back all of my comments to their source (alas!). You really shouldn't let it worry you. 

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Posted in The Labour Ward! (I.P.)