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I like how you allude to a
Posted on Sat, 28 Dec 2019
I like how you allude to a controlling personality, the way in Maths there is only one right answer:
you have never lost your cold symmetry.
From a distance you appear gentler,
rounder, but closer up I endured
the...
Read full commentPosted in Decagon
Oh! So many beautiful
Posted on Sun, 22 Dec 2019
Oh! So many beautiful descriptions!
"glitter still" LOVE THIS
"wind that paces and searches" buffetting consonants
"unrolls its mists" soft sounds
and this!
"I can't rejoice and I can't pray and
I won't...
Read full commentPosted in God rest ye merry, gentlemen
my mind is made up of Tojan
Posted on Sat, 21 Dec 2019
my mind is made up of Tojan horses - wow!
Read full commentPosted in Internal Organs
I like this too, it is weird
Posted on Tue, 17 Dec 2019
I like this too, it is weird how colours can seem strong sometimes even when it is cloudy, as if the light is inside things instead of shining on them? I particularly like how you notice the leaves. You brought me with you into the moment
Read full commentPosted in Today
You have caught that
Posted on Tue, 17 Dec 2019
You have caught that anticipation at the year's end perfectly, the air thick with fog like packing material. Your last two lines hopeful and the lively rhythm gives a positive feeling
Read full commentPosted in Chill
i am sorry I did not know
Posted on Sat, 14 Dec 2019
i am sorry I did not know what to say about your poem, like a deer when it smells blood I guess, such a wrongness in it. Now you have explained I understand why. Because no one wants to be able to understand this subject, but also you long to,...
Read full commentPosted in The Worst
Agree with Jane, your poem
Posted on Tue, 10 Dec 2019
Agree with Jane, your poem starts off tight and jabby then unwinds into calmness at the end.
Read full commentPosted in Awoke, then awaking
I liked the hurried way this
Posted on Thu, 05 Dec 2019
I liked the hurried way this starts and breathless way it finishes, like a sigh of relief. Pseudo Summer is a good phrase!
Read full commentPosted in From winter to …
i like your images of the
Posted on Wed, 04 Dec 2019
i like your images of the landscape, also how you link accent with water - sea, rain, mists, phlegm (!) How language like water is everywhere, acid or soft, salt or sweet, in the air, on the ground (page?) in us.The last lines I thought were...
Read full commentPosted in A Slip of the Mother Tongue
Posted on Sat, 30 Nov 2019
"low glinting golden" I love the long vowels in this! Like sunbeams
"winter evening sunshine" and this line is nippy
"brightening bricks" and the immediate idea of cosiness here
"dusk falls, then darkness
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Posted in The End of a Brighter November Day
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