| Story | The Nutty Detective - Part III - A Craven Danger Mystery | hudsonmoon | 3 | 4 years 10 months ago |
| Story | Baby Makes Three ( Part One ) | skinner_jennifer | 10 | 4 years 10 months ago |
| Blog entry | Calling all poets! | london_calling79 | 2 | 4 years 10 months ago |
| Story | My Space | Robert Barker | 4 | 4 years 10 months ago |
| Story | The Plastic Mariner | Ed Crane | 14 | 4 years 10 months ago |
| Story | Moving | Ewan | 4 | 4 years 10 months ago |
| Story | Tuned in | lev821 | 2 | 4 years 10 months ago |
| Story | Confronting Demons | skinner_jennifer | 22 | 4 years 10 months ago |
| Blog entry | 'Swim With Me In Deep Water' by Penny Sharman | Cerasus Poetry | 3 | 4 years 10 months ago |
| Blog entry | Story and Poem of the Week and Inspiration Point | Insertponceyfre... | 0 | 4 years 10 months ago |
| Story | Angel 64 (old friends) | celticman | 6 | 4 years 10 months ago |
| Story | never had sex with dylan | JupiterMoon | 3 | 4 years 10 months ago |
| Story | Quincite | Ewan | 5 | 4 years 10 months ago |
| Story | Changing history | Parson Thru | 5 | 4 years 10 months ago |
| Story | The Strand-on-the-Green Strongwoman | brian cross | 3 | 4 years 10 months ago |
| Story | Among the Audh | mandylifeboats | 4 | 4 years 10 months ago |
| Story | Irira | mandylifeboats | 2 | 4 years 10 months ago |
| Story | Sleep like a Lord | Terrence Oblong | 3 | 4 years 10 months ago |
| Story | We are Rocks | Jane Hyphen | 8 | 4 years 10 months ago |
| Story | Letters to CHIP: The Easter Bunny | LittleRedHat | 2 | 4 years 10 months ago |
| Story | The Secrets of Punchinello | luigi_pagano | 8 | 4 years 10 months ago |
| Story | Anne's Secret Diary | luigi_pagano | 2 | 4 years 10 months ago |
| Story | On Epsom Downs | luigi_pagano | 2 | 4 years 10 months ago |
| Story | Angel 62 (night troubles) | celticman | 5 | 4 years 10 months ago |
| Blog entry | Story and Poem of the Week and Inspiration Point | Insertponceyfre... | 0 | 4 years 10 months ago |
this is looking better too!
Posted on Mon, 31 Mar 2014
this is looking better too! One more tip (and it's something I always do): in the dialogue, once I've written it, I always go back and make sure I've abbreviated things in the way one would if one were talking - I've, it's etc etc. It makes...
Read full commentPosted in The Labour Planet - A Working Title - Part Three
ha - made me laugh! I always
Posted on Sat, 05 Apr 2014
ha - made me laugh! I always wonder where you get your plots from...
Read full commentPosted in Larry and Mick Get Frozen
The dialogue in this part is
Posted on Thu, 03 Apr 2014
The dialogue in this part is much better! The only bit I found slightly hard to believe was here:
“Yes, it is not looking good but if there is one thing we can take from this it is that we seem to be heading for a planet that can...
Read full commentPosted in The Labour Planet A Working Title Part Four 1118 words
I'm still really enjoying
Posted on Mon, 31 Mar 2014
I'm still really enjoying this - and i see congratulations are in order for being pick of the day! I have one tiny suggestion for this part: the dialogue at the end, between the woman and the man is great - very authentic, but the conversation...
Read full commentPosted in The Labour Planet - A Working Title - Part Three
what a fantastic opening
Posted on Sat, 29 Mar 2014
what a fantastic opening chapter - I'm very much looking forward to reading the next part!
Read full commentPosted in The Labour Planet - A Working Title - First Draft
Hello - this was very
Posted on Tue, 18 Mar 2014
Hello - this was very readable, it has a nice easy flow to it. It is quite slow moving though, and i think it could be improved with a good edit - maybe cut it down by a third or so? Welcome to ABC!
Read full commentPosted in All my creation - chapter 1
This is very well done. I
Posted on Mon, 17 Mar 2014
This is very well done. I like the use of repetition, and I think the ending is a good one. It would definitely be worth going through this again with your spellcheck: your English is fantastic, but there are some adjustments needed
Read full commentPosted in Lucky Number Seven
Albert, why don't you put a
Posted on Fri, 14 Mar 2014
Albert, why don't you put a clickable link to your novel on here - and also in the forum? I'm sure you'll get more of an audience that way. good luck!
Read full commentPosted in ONE GOOD TURN
"As far as the adjective use,
Posted on Sat, 04 Jan 2014
"As far as the adjective use, all of my writing tends to be heavy on the imagery, and the idea of taking it out makes me feel like the story/writing won't be 'mine' anymore, if that makes sense. Do you think the "prose" detracts from the story to...
Read full commentPosted in August Shadow (working title): Prologue
Welcome to ABC Venegas. I
Posted on Sun, 15 Dec 2013
Welcome to ABC Venegas. I enjoyed reading this - you have an easy writing style. I hope you'll post more soon. As you mention specific people and places quite often, you might want to change their names, given the nature of your writing.
Read full commentPosted in Our Meeting
Pages