Jane Hyphen
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My stories have been read 1406126 times
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618 of my 3,058 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 672 votes
My stories
Echoes of a Dead Whale
If you could hear my song You’d know we shared the stars Jewels immersed forever ours Echoes locked inside fathoms Among dead men and gardens If you...
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A Man Riding the Tube Train
A man riding the tube train Sitting in the sallow grease of his day His dreams in his father’s briefcase Dropping the filings of his doubts Into a...
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My Favourite Colour's Changed
My favourite colour’s changed Behind this mask I have evolved Years gone by, assumptions Made we stay the same We’ve crossed countries, life Stages...
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We are Rocks
we are just rocks formed in a mussy molten fluke a chance fuse fused from the glowing flecks of everything that ever stirred on this star we rock and...
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Dark Rooms
By the time she realised It was too late The label stitched, double Stitches deep inside How the needle stabbed For all the years Ahead to lay upon a...
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I think this is pure quality.
Posted on Fri, 07 Dec 2018
I think this is pure quality. It sounds so good in my head, I want to hear it read aloud by a man with a nice voice. Those solid consonants hold each other up without rubbing together, just like the branches of a tree Rhiannon.
Read full commentPosted in Bare beauty
I'm really enjoying these,
Posted on Sat, 10 Nov 2018
I'm really enjoying these, well-written and engaging. I too liked the description of the high heels stabbing the carpet, honestly why would you wear high heels in a care home, even if you were a rabied manager on a power trip. Your brother's...
Read full commentPosted in Gift: A Son's Story (Push)
Hi Di_Hard, I know, I can't
Posted on Fri, 09 Nov 2018
Hi Di_Hard, I know, I can't even imagine the itchy wool uniform in the cold wet weather, it's difficult to even scratch the surface of what those soldiers suffered. I agree about society being eroded, we are slowly losing the building blocks of a...
Read full commentPosted in Trodden Steps
I like this. The pattern,
Posted on Thu, 08 Nov 2018
I like this. The pattern, people re-enforcing that familiar message, you don't quite fit, you're going against the flow, stroking our fur the wrong way. Then ending where he does his own thing, that's the only way to go.
Read full commentPosted in Band of One
So sad and so clever, we don
Posted on Sat, 03 Nov 2018
So sad and so clever, we don't really need to know about the bit in between.
Read full commentPosted in Struggling
Thanks Hilary. The psyche can
Posted on Sat, 27 Oct 2018
Thanks Hilary. The psyche can be troubling indeed and go wrong at any point, no-one is mental illness proof but you're right about rest. I suppose in times of stress people cannot get adequate rest and then the mind can unravel.
Read full commentPosted in The Hidden Help
This has such a stillness to
Posted on Wed, 03 Oct 2018
This has such a stillness to it, your storytelling enables the reader to access these remote spiritual realms with a quiet ease.
Read full commentPosted in Promises Beyond The Veil Of Life ( PT 42 )
I can almost taste that salty
Posted on Mon, 10 Sep 2018
I can almost taste that salty fresh air, so much imagery, as has been said, from just a handful of choice words. It's like one of those tiny seascape paintings so skilfully crafted.
Read full commentPosted in storm cooking
The dismal nature of human
Posted on Sat, 08 Sep 2018
The dismal nature of human frailty captured artfully as ever. I always have strong imagery when I read your writing, it's always grey and full of sickly souls.
Read full commentPosted in two-faced
This is so peaceful, sweet
Posted on Sat, 08 Sep 2018
This is so peaceful, sweet and neat, a beloved cat, a stone and a tree, all beautiful things cast by nature.
Read full commentPosted in A STONE
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