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I have 97 stories published in 0 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 58065 times and 99 of my stories have been cherry picked.
44 of my 697 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 41 votes

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Cherry

Ready. Aim. Fire.

Before , when they barely knew each other, Ben told her he had a secret. It prickled for years, under the surface, under her skin. He would often...
Gold cherry

You know the sort

You know the sort, wide mouthed, google-eyes blinking like car lights the type to stand back from the crowd in dusty tweeds, puff puffing on a pipe...

I remember

I remember watching her eat a six pack of sticky snowballs with her back against the grey radiator. I remember seeing a boy peeing onto the base of...
Cherry

The Inquisitive Mood

Do you know what a supernova event is? Would you do it for charity without knowing what it is? Or a fire-walk? Maybe next year you could do the Loony...
Cherry

Exercise in Style in Four Ways

Innocence He looks funny, like a dwarf, or a midget (don’t tell mum; I’m not allowed to use those words). But yes, like he should be in a circus! He...

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44 of my comments have received 41 Great Feedback votes

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Nicely done - I like the

Posted on Tue, 25 Aug 2015

Nicely done - I like the structure, rhyming and the use of the U turn in the ending :)

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Posted in The Ultimate Outcome (IP)

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Nice imagery with the trit

Posted on Tue, 25 Aug 2015

Nice imagery with the trit trot and pony tail streaming in the wind. Loved the winged sunshine child. Beautiful heartfelt last stanza...and lovely photo.

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Posted in On my Daughter Learning to Ride

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A most believable voice. Feel

Posted on Sun, 23 Aug 2015

A most believable voice. Feel outraged and angry at the misunderstanding; 'She just never says 'No' or 'Yes'.  You've portrayed this character and highlighted this issue really well. Only thing I'd say is- a smalll suggestion- do you need that...

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Posted in Saturday Night and Sunday Morning

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Really worth sorting out

Posted on Wed, 19 Aug 2015

Really worth sorting out those few typo's as this is really good and heartfelt as Bee says.

'bur' is maybe but? 

Really enjoyed 'word silhouettes/ tree cigarettes'

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Posted in Negative Spaces

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Found this engaging both in

Posted on Sat, 08 Aug 2015

Found this engaging both in the characters inner thoughts and story line. Lovely conversational voice and the last paragraph ties it up nicely.

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Posted in The Path of the Black Cat

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Lovely tribute to sisters - I

Posted on Thu, 23 Jul 2015

Lovely tribute to sisters - I have to agree they help 'see the goodness in me'.

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Posted in Sisters Are Angels

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Takes away the morbidity of

Posted on Wed, 08 Jul 2015

Takes away the morbidity of cemetry, graves, death. Makes death sound freeing. I really enjoyed this, thanks for sharing!

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Posted in Last Request

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Sweet.. bittersweet.. sharp

Posted on Thu, 09 Jul 2015

Sweet.. bittersweet.. sharp and poignant.

'hair the colour of straw with a wonky smile'

A most lovely and emotive read. Loved the vibrancy of the Mumbai red and gold.

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Posted in Sweet Daughter Mine

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I found the words used at

Posted on Sat, 04 Jul 2015

I found the words used at each line break worked effectively- for instance; black, rubbish, throw, in first stanza. Some pungent smells created with the green bin contents, and an emotive last stanza- enjoyed reading this! 

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Posted in Garbage

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This is lovely. One of those

Posted on Tue, 30 Jun 2015

This is lovely. One of those poems which you want to read again and again. Heartwarming. 

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Posted in Love and Adoration

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