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All the while I was thinking
Posted on Mon, 01 Jun 2015
All the while I was thinking who was he, why was he at the mirror- so you had me hooked from the start! Touching moment with 'but there hadn't been a son'...found that emotive. The ageing character works well with the decline of his trade.
Read full commentPosted in The Finishing Touch
Otherworldly, dark,
Posted on Sun, 24 May 2015
Otherworldly, dark, mysterious and sad. It feels like a psychological description of a 'place' to me. A dark place in which he is stuck. I love how your work leaves the reader hanging and provokes thought!
Read full commentPosted in Gave it to the sea
I found this edgy and was
Posted on Thu, 21 May 2015
I found this edgy and was really gripped by the underlying tension throughout the story. K binning the yogurts is very telling of their relationship! (might be a wee typo at 'an dark hue'?)
It leaves me asking lots of questions and wanting...
Read full commentPosted in Passing Through - 1/3 - Passing the time/Three-day work trip
This is very well crafted.
Posted on Tue, 19 May 2015
This is very well crafted. The train setting is effective to the characters inner thoughts. In particular I liked the character thinking she had stopped the train using her mind!
Also ' the edges draw paper- cuts down across my nerves, ...
Read full commentPosted in I Can Stop When I Want To
Heartbreaking...yet told in a
Posted on Mon, 18 May 2015
Heartbreaking...yet told in a way that is powerful and engaging.
Read full commentPosted in No Angels
Really effective imagery
Posted on Sat, 09 May 2015
Really effective imagery achieved especially in stanza five - ice-lolly milk breath scatters dandelion clocks...toddler chasing dollar bills...flickering phones..
I've seen something new in it every time I've read it- brilliant...
Read full commentPosted in Montage of my sons. IP
Beautifully composed. I felt
Posted on Fri, 08 May 2015
Beautifully composed. I felt like an observer of nature reading this; it's ever-changing birth and death.
Some vivid imagery created especially through the first stanza.
Read full commentPosted in Buggered if I Know.
This made me laugh- very
Posted on Mon, 06 Apr 2015
This made me laugh- very humourous! I can relate to the sisterly simmerings which run deep into adulthood. Nicely done :)
Read full commentPosted in Simmering Sibblings
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