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46 of my 690 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 43 votes

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Thanks everyone for lovely encouraging comments- this is getting edited now for submission x
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What is a Marriage?

I wrote and read this wee piece out at my sisters wedding :)
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Cherry

Ready. Aim. Fire.

Before , when they barely knew each other, Ben told her he had a secret. It prickled for years, under the surface, under her skin. He would often...
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You know the sort

You know the sort, wide mouthed, google-eyes blinking like car lights the type to stand back from the crowd in dusty tweeds, puff puffing on a pipe...

I remember

I remember watching her eat a six pack of sticky snowballs with her back against the grey radiator. I remember seeing a boy peeing onto the base of...

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46 of my comments have received 43 Great Feedback votes

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All the while I was thinking

Posted on Mon, 01 Jun 2015

All the while I was thinking who was he, why was he at the mirror- so you had me hooked from the start!  Touching moment with  'but there hadn't been a son'...found that emotive. The ageing character works well with the decline of his trade.

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Posted in The Finishing Touch

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Otherworldly, dark,

Posted on Sun, 24 May 2015

Otherworldly, dark, mysterious and sad. It feels like a psychological description of a 'place' to me. A dark place in which he is stuck. I love how your work leaves the reader hanging and provokes thought! 

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Posted in Gave it to the sea

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I found this edgy and was

Posted on Thu, 21 May 2015

I found this edgy and was really gripped by the underlying tension throughout the story. K binning the yogurts is very telling of their relationship! (might be a wee typo at 'an dark hue'?)

It leaves me asking lots of questions and wanting...

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Posted in Passing Through - 1/3 - Passing the time/Three-day work trip

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This is very well crafted.

Posted on Tue, 19 May 2015

This is very well crafted. The train setting is effective to the characters inner thoughts. In particular I liked the character thinking she had stopped the train using her mind! 

 Also ' the edges draw paper- cuts down across my nerves, ...

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Posted in I Can Stop When I Want To

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Heartbreaking...yet told in a

Posted on Mon, 18 May 2015

Heartbreaking...yet told in a way that is powerful and engaging.

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Posted in No Angels

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Really effective imagery

Posted on Sat, 09 May 2015

Really effective imagery achieved especially in stanza five - ice-lolly milk breath scatters dandelion clocks...toddler chasing dollar bills...flickering phones.. 

I've seen something new in it every time I've read it- brilliant...

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Posted in Montage of my sons. IP

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Beautifully composed. I felt

Posted on Fri, 08 May 2015

Beautifully composed. I felt like an observer of nature reading this; it's ever-changing birth and death.

Some vivid imagery created especially through the first stanza. 

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Posted in Buggered if I Know.

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This made me laugh- very

Posted on Mon, 06 Apr 2015

This made me laugh- very humourous! I can relate to the sisterly simmerings which run deep into adulthood. Nicely done :) 

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Posted in Simmering Sibblings

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