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I did post this last Saturday for the Inspiration Point, but then took it down after about ten minutes as I felt uncomfortable with some of it. So I have chopped some parts and extended others.

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174 of my comments have received 183 Great Feedback votes

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Wonderful poem full of

Posted on Fri, 20 Dec 2019

Wonderful poem full of startling images. :)

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Posted in woods, late

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Great. Loved the repetition

Posted on Tue, 12 Nov 2019

Great. Loved the repetition of super noodles too, made me laugh, but lots of sadnesses in this too. :) 

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Posted in Shrinkage

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Love how this moves from the

Posted on Thu, 14 Nov 2019

Love how this moves from the everyday to magical to devastating. :)

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Posted in layers

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I really like the matter-of

Posted on Mon, 04 Nov 2019

I really like the matter-of-factness of this when you can sense the depth beneath the words. I think it's a clever and affecting poem. :)

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Posted in Trying to Remember What It Was Like

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As mentioned above, I like

Posted on Tue, 05 Nov 2019

As mentioned above, I like how you've woven the details and stresses of moving and sadnesses with the initial shocks in the house and bonfire night. Glad it had a happy ending. :)

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Posted in New Beginnings

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Hi Jenny, thank you! Atlantic

Posted on Fri, 01 Nov 2019

Hi Jenny, thank you! Atlantic salmon sometimes return to their nascent rivers 2-3 times, I think Pacific salmon  are the salmon that only make one return if I remember correctly. Nevertheless, being a salmon is a short, tiring and risky business...

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Posted in Ecstasy

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I like that you have included

Posted on Thu, 31 Oct 2019

I like that you have included that we don't require them to have permits and welcome them. If only we could apply this to all migrants. I love birds so enjoyed your visiting geese. :)

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Posted in Geese

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Your poems are always so

Posted on Thu, 31 Oct 2019

Your poems are always so sensory. 

'a dashing sky scatter

of black stars swirl' 

'rain-sound wings'

Very lovely. :)

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Posted in starlings

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Great observations and

Posted on Fri, 01 Nov 2019

Great observations and cleverly written with humour and pathos. Black leather waistcoat, oof, no. Enjoyed reading. :)

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Posted in With a Blue Jug in Her Hand

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Another lovely

Posted on Fri, 01 Nov 2019

Another lovely autobiographical piece to read. I love how you sequentially share all the important details that gently reveal the twists and turns of what happened both in terms of events and how you felt, it makes these so interesting and...

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Posted in The Last Man in my Life

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