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This is a great poem, so many

Posted on Wed, 21 Aug 2019

This is a great poem, so many brilliant lines, loved, ‘vertigo gives fear to stumble’ amongst pretty much all the rest. :)

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Posted in Sweet Thing

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This is really good. I think

Posted on Tue, 20 Aug 2019

This is really good. I think it encapsulates the issues / dilemmas of antidepressants really well for those who take them. I like how you’ve managed to include the routine submission to taking them too. It’s a sad poem, but an experience that is...

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Posted in anti depressants

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I like the ideas, the use of

Posted on Tue, 20 Aug 2019

I like the ideas, the use of speech and the effort of your rhymes. You hint at the father being difficult, ‘taunting’, but don’t reveal enough perhaps here for me? I guess I think you could base it more on this? What are you trying to tell / say...

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Posted in the zoo

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These are very sweet and nice

Posted on Mon, 19 Aug 2019

These are very sweet and nice to hear you reading them. You have captured childish states well with these, I think. :)

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Posted in KidsSpeak

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Oh I didn’t know about the

Posted on Fri, 16 Aug 2019

Oh I didn’t know about the invasion. That definitely sounds a bit scary. They can gather in numbers can’t they. A plot of jellyfish. Glad you enjoyed, thanks for your comment. :)

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This is a lovely, delicate

Posted on Thu, 15 Aug 2019

This is a lovely, delicate poem. Like a leaf of a poem actually with its hint of darkness too.  I loved, ‘breathe leaf breath’ and the threatening wind. 

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Posted in airmail from the amazon (august 2018)

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This is very lovely. I like

Posted on Wed, 14 Aug 2019

This is very lovely. I like your use of emphasis, but all wonderful.

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Posted in prairie river flowing

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Rhiannon, these are so good.

Posted on Mon, 12 Aug 2019

Rhiannon, these are so good. I have been popping back to read them in turn. Though I enjoyed hearing your Welsh accent too - which is poetic in itself, I think. April and December are my favourites - perhaps for what they describe as much as your...

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Posted in Through the year month by month

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Such an interesting piece of

Posted on Tue, 13 Aug 2019

Such an interesting piece of writing about memory. Enjoyed it very much. Made me think of synapses as light or stars. Lovely. 

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Posted in Remembering

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So beautiful. I enjoyed every

Posted on Fri, 02 Aug 2019

So beautiful. I enjoyed every bit of this poem, but the opening lines alone are wonderful. And you know what’s so lasting about poems like this, for me, is the next time I come across kelp I will remember this.

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