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Will I fight against that
Posted on Tue, 17 Jul 2012Will I fight against that leopard or would I chicken out?”... you've changed tenses here, I'd go with either would would, or will will. fear s and for sure, not even a leopard!... fears? The wonders of nature eh? This is an uplifting story about...Read full comment
Posted in Ordeal or opportunity?
No! No! No!!! You really,
Posted on Wed, 01 Feb 2012No! No! No!!! You really, really, really don't need exclamation marks in prose. If you do use them they should only ever be used in extreme circumstances. Unless you are purposefully using a child's voice but then you have to make it clear to the...Read full comment
Posted in It’s Gonna Be Me, Not You!
Aw that's really sweet,
Posted on Thu, 28 Jun 2012Aw that's really sweet, lovely ending. Do you know what the first few stanzas of this reminded me of? escaped baby iguanas. And I've chased my share of them. They are like lightning.. This was lovely and next time I see a balloon floating around...Read full comment
Posted in The Runaway Heart (Redrafted)
Wow, fantastic. This one
Posted on Sun, 20 Jan 2008Wow, fantastic. This one really hit a nerve with me. While in prague this year we saw the same man twice. the first time was in the early hours of the morning and we giggled as he bounced from wall to wall and had terrible problems staying upright...Read full comment
Posted in Twisted