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I have 609 stories published in 11 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 555590 times and 376 of my stories have been cherry picked.
74 of my 3,447 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 76 votes

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Silas Nash Book 1: Hush Hush Honeysuckle: Chapter 12

By Sooz006 on Wed, 12 Jul 2023

‘See, Max? Everything we have is circumstantial. So, he was your old tutor. So what? That doesn’t mean you took tines to the man and stabbed him into...
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Silas Nash books 1: Hush Hush Honeysuckle: Chapter 11 (b)

By Sooz006 on Tue, 11 Jul 2023

‘First thing’ turned out to be after ten o’clock. Gathering information, they said. He hadn’t slept. Somebody was singing Billy Bragg’s New England...
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Silas Nash Book 1: Hush Hush Honeysuckle: Chapter 11 (a)

By Sooz006 on Mon, 10 Jul 2023

Max was manhandled from the van with a semi-circle of policemen in riot gear around him. This was like some kind of surreal dream. He expected a...
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Silas Nash Book 1: Hush Hush Honeysuckle: Chapter 10

By Sooz006 on Sun, 09 Jul 2023

Jessica showed her security pass to start her shift at BAE Systems Barrow. She was proud to be a tiny part of the history that was responsible for...
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Silas Nash Book 1: Hush Hush Honeysuckle: Chapter 9 ( b)

By Sooz006 on Fri, 07 Jul 2023

It was tough for Max to make friends when he was boarding at a private school. Jon and Bobby still called him a posh git at every opportunity, but...
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74 of my comments have received 76 Great Feedback votes

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Odd use of capitalisation. I

Posted on Sun, 02 Mar 2014

Odd use of capitalisation. I'm not sure if this is done intentionally, but I'd be tempted to re-look at it and go for proper usage. 

 

I like the wierd stiltedness of this, it reads a like an old Chinese proverb and that makes it...

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Posted in Man, Woman and Bird

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Slowly begins to reflect and

Posted on Sun, 26 Jan 2014

Slowly begins to reflect and refract amid a golden hue;... I think the word begins here, weakens the piece, up to this point it's strong and assertive while being poignant and beautiful, just that one little word made it feel weaker than it had...

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Posted in The Deer.

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Of course the other chap had

Posted on Sun, 26 Jan 2014

Of course the other chap had to be vaporised, but you've got to make sacrifices.... cute! I like this. 

 

And whenever he is asked if he has any regrets, he will say, "It's a bit draughty on the moon."...Nice.

 

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Posted in It's a Bit Draughty on the Moon

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eyes that scream whilehis

Posted on Sat, 25 Jan 2014

eyes that scream whilehis mouth devours... space

 

This is his huge stabbed throne!
Where screaming Saturnus and the shining stars do live. 
This--- he calls his home... I like this, I think it sets the atmosphere for...

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Posted in saturnius

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Luigi this is gorgeous. This

Posted on Tue, 10 Dec 2013

Luigi this is gorgeous. This isn't words it's a painting. 

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Posted in From Out a Window (I.P.)

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And why shouldn't they? A

Posted on Fri, 03 May 2013

And why shouldn't they? A lovely well thought out poem, nicely written.Read full comment

Posted in Pigs might...

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Will I fight against that

Posted on Tue, 17 Jul 2012

Will I fight against that leopard or would I chicken out?”... you've changed tenses here, I'd go with either would would, or will will. fear s and for sure, not even a leopard!... fears? The wonders of nature eh? This is an uplifting story about...Read full comment

Posted in Ordeal or opportunity?

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No! No! No!!! You really,

Posted on Wed, 01 Feb 2012

No! No! No!!! You really, really, really don't need exclamation marks in prose. If you do use them they should only ever be used in extreme circumstances. Unless you are purposefully using a child's voice but then you have to make it clear to the...Read full comment

Posted in It’s Gonna Be Me, Not You!

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Aw that's really sweet,

Posted on Thu, 28 Jun 2012

Aw that's really sweet, lovely ending. Do you know what the first few stanzas of this reminded me of? escaped baby iguanas. And I've chased my share of them. They are like lightning.. This was lovely and next time I see a balloon floating around...Read full comment

Posted in The Runaway Heart (Redrafted)

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I like this, I especially

Posted on Sun, 20 Jan 2008

I like this, I especially like the phrase 'weaving trees' I hope oyu idn't mean weaving through the trees, because for me that would spoil the lovely image of somebody weaving a tree.Read full comment

Posted in Cicada

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