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A Medal!

For R, who sends smiles.
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Symmetry

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All As I Watched

about tomorrow
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Cherry

Counting the Hours

I'm counting down the hours until my daughter arrives home from over the sea and far away. It's been three years since I've seen her. I speak to her...
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Two Years

TWO YEARS isn't enough to watch her grow into the woman I imagine she'll become. The babe, a man I predict to be calm - attentive - oh, to never see...
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295 of my comments have received 281 Great Feedback votes

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I agree with Vera - a poem be

Posted on Fri, 14 Mar 2014

I agree with Vera - a poem be read out loud. Entertainingly and wittily written.

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Posted in Shorty

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I'm so relieved the photo has

Posted on Fri, 07 Mar 2014

I'm so relieved the photo has nothing to do with the poem, Moya. Very expressive of those emotions, wistful and yearning. Lovely words - I could be wrong, but if it was me, I'd lose the commas at the ends of the lines where sentences don't need...

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Posted in Love?

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Hi Steve.

Posted on Sat, 01 Mar 2014

Hi Steve.

When you stop drinking you start thinking - thinking of all the stuff you used to block out and that's painful at times but your writing is a great friend to you here - keep going. Really, keep this up and in a short while you...

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Posted in being sober 3

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Brilliantly written - really

Posted on Thu, 27 Feb 2014

Brilliantly written - really moving. Puts so much into perspective that I am sitting here wondering why I have ever bothered writing most of the stuff I've prattled on about. 

 

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Posted in Flood

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Hi Trish. 

Posted on Thu, 20 Feb 2014

Hi Trish. 

What a lovely poem. I noticed a couple of typos - in stanza 1&2 the word 'to' has an exta 'o'  - should read 'to'. And at the end of the first stanza, I was wondering if it should be - 

 

That we all woke up...

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Posted in Thought Of The Day :))))))

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Hi Trish.

Posted on Tue, 18 Feb 2014

Hi Trish.

Its so great you've used your 'Thought' and turned it into a poem. I love that you are so positive and always try to bring sunshine. I really like the idea of the first stanza, but I think the second still needs a little work as...

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Posted in My Thought Of The Moment.

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I liked the child-like

Posted on Thu, 13 Feb 2014

I liked the child-like quality of the sentences  - eg. 'Another day, a long time ago, I was stepping out of a boat and tripped and hit my head very hard.' For me, the apparent simplicity is what takes you back and forth, as mentioned by scratch...

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Posted in The Passageway

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It is the embodiment of Death

Posted on Fri, 07 Feb 2014

It is the embodiment of Death and Rebirth;

like how a beautiful rose blossoms in the spring

only to wither away and die from the touch

of the purifying entity christened as "Winter".

 

Hi MT. In my mind, this is...

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Posted in Winter (Edited)

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You really captured the

Posted on Tue, 04 Feb 2014

You really captured the feelings. 

Enjoyed.

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Posted in In Your Light

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This is very real writing and

Posted on Mon, 27 Jan 2014

This is very real writing and believable. I like the way you end up feeling for both characters even though you want him to have the strength to leave such a destructive relationship, which although is horrendously bad at times, seems for the...

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Posted in Please Don't Go.

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