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A Lonely Place
Signing up
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Night Visitor
Early childhood memory
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I think this works so well as
Posted on Thu, 03 Jul 2014
I think this works so well as a short story, but like scratch, I'd love to see it go on. It is hard hitting, but it made me want to cry that anyone could buy - 'if the price is right and they’re in good nick (them - then? ) I'll take...
Read full commentPosted in Welcome To England
I know I shouldn't pick just
Posted on Tue, 24 Jun 2014
'ride the splendid spine
of a thought-train,'
I know I shouldn't pick just this bit out, but I adored it, so I did. If this is you not writing poetry because it's out there to see, Lord help us when you try.
Beauty...
Read full commentPosted in Poetry and That
The other half of the story.
Posted on Thu, 19 Jun 2014
Morning, Tina.
The other half of the story. Poignant and perfectly worded to draw appropriate sympathy. She's a hero.
Read full commentPosted in No Fairy-Tale – This
Hi Tina.
Posted on Wed, 04 Jun 2014
Hi Tina.
This could mean something different to each reader. It meant something to me and I loved it and found it very moving.
Read full commentPosted in Phoenix Rising
Hi Poetica.
Posted on Mon, 02 Jun 2014
Hi Poetica.
I like this poem because although it is an outpouring of emotion, which is a good thing, and something I have often found to be very helpful, you have taken the time and trouble to think carefully about the structure and rhyme...
Read full commentPosted in The Colour Brown
She has a voice! Love it!
Posted on Sat, 31 May 2014
She has a voice!
Love it!
Read full commentPosted in Air Kisses
I love this poem, too. I wish
Posted on Tue, 27 May 2014
I love this poem, too. I wish everyone in the world could read it, especially those who would / should see themselves in it. It should be filmed and shown between adverts on TV. And I'd love this to be the next poem of the week. Really well done...
Read full commentPosted in I Wish You'd Dye Your Hair
Hi socialeaf.
Posted on Tue, 27 May 2014
Hi socialeaf.
In my mind, I can see it, hear it, and feel the power. It's only my opinion, but I think the fist stanza might not be needed, and that the poem would be stronger starting with the second. But as I said, that's only my...
Read full commentPosted in The Song of the Pick
This is a brilliant story,
Posted on Mon, 19 May 2014
This is a brilliant story, Moya, and sad. I kept thinking that it might be better for the story if he just had 'trench foot', rather than a bad case of it. Otherwise he might not be able to continue - once gangrene had set in, and all. But I...
Read full commentPosted in The World at War!
Oh, that's so horrible! The
Posted on Fri, 02 May 2014
Oh, that's so horrible! The picture brings to life her emotions as much as your lovely poem does. I can just imagine the moment the sun is blocked out and the tomb is sealed.
Read full commentPosted in FAREWELL THE SUN (IP)
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