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I'm Already There
A beautiful memory from our archives.
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Bee's Journey - (the last leg)
We take it for granted that to make a journey is to travel from A to B, but it's not always as simple as that. There are often so many stops and...
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Diagnosis a True Beginning
I remember the look on my face as it melted and slid like The Scream to a puddle about my shocked toes off the floor. And in that cracked second I...
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The Surgeon - (dedicated to my surgeon, Mr. Haneif - who was so kind)
He guides us past the earth's drop and catches us lightly in a fall of stars; flies us through a flare that sears bright through our hearts at the...
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There's something apparently
Posted on Tue, 27 Oct 2015
There's something apparently casual - almost throwaway in the 'sometimes' of this - whilst still alluding to the deeper subject that works as a contrast with the alternative suggestion that 'sometimes' it might not be so. I love this poem.
Read full commentPosted in Some days begin with a swim
R reading this in the early
Posted on Fri, 08 May 2015
I'm reading this in the early hours because I woke and couldn't sleep, and it's got me in bits. Especially -
'and a moth
Read full commentfeathered my cheek, or
may have been the slight
stutter of your eyelids
as you knelt to...
Posted in Pas de Deux for Violin and Sky
Such a perfect flow to this,
Posted on Fri, 01 May 2015
Such a perfect flow to this, Ed. To take a tiny detail and examine it from all aspects and see it in all colours to create a gem of art like this takes a talent for seeing deceptive simplicity. Every detail is developed so smoothly, till the end...
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Mixed with grief's delusion,
Posted on Wed, 21 Jan 2015
Mixed with grief's delusion, there's a sense of hard reality in this. Suiside is such a hard loss to come to term with, and his death would be viewed by others as either, him not being able to cope with the grief, or him wanting to be with her,...
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Reading this is like
Posted on Wed, 01 Oct 2014
Reading this is like contemplating a painting, where you can imagine you hear the sounds around it. The last stanza feels wistful to me.
'Morning peels back
under their wings;' I loved that. There's something about their leaving...
Read full commentPosted in October's Geese
Hi BR.
Posted on Sun, 20 Jul 2014
Hi BR.
Your poem is so delightfully surreal that it shouldn't make sense, but worryingly, it does to me. I love the opening stanza - starting out with childlike simplicity 'I closed my eyes on the sunshine at a chair', and apparently...
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Hi Ed.
Posted on Tue, 10 Jun 2014
Hi Ed.
Interesting theory - you really have turned religion in general on it's head here. I guess there is something in it being about people using religion as an excuse to carry out atrocities, along with so much hypocracy. A lot of it...
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Hi CM.
Posted on Sun, 18 May 2014
Hi CM.
You got every tiny action without even telling it. 'Mum stood in the doorway between kitchen and hall and frowned at me short-sightedly' - I can see that expression.
'although the kitchen was warm and full of the aroma of...
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Hi jolono.
Posted on Fri, 28 Feb 2014
Hi jolono.
I found this interesting in that the rhythm, being jaunty and quite cheerful, as when someone is walking home unaware that they shouldn't perhaps be whistling if they knew what they were about to find out - (de-da de-da de dum-...
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So sad, this. You really got
Posted on Mon, 09 Dec 2013
So sad, this. You really got the emotions across. Character well portrayed and her possible feelings explored..
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