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Panic Unnecessary
Thoughts
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Bleak is the Night
Down in the moments
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Going Round in Circles
Finding a way out
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Flight of the Bumblebee
Edited version of one I posted some time back, but have been working on ever since. Had to post it now - it's doing my head in.
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Hi socialeaf.
Posted on Tue, 27 May 2014
Hi socialeaf.
In my mind, I can see it, hear it, and feel the power. It's only my opinion, but I think the fist stanza might not be needed, and that the poem would be stronger starting with the second. But as I said, that's only my...
Read full commentPosted in The Song of the Pick
This is a brilliant story,
Posted on Mon, 19 May 2014
This is a brilliant story, Moya, and sad. I kept thinking that it might be better for the story if he just had 'trench foot', rather than a bad case of it. Otherwise he might not be able to continue - once gangrene had set in, and all. But I...
Read full commentPosted in The World at War!
Oh, that's so horrible! The
Posted on Fri, 02 May 2014
Oh, that's so horrible! The picture brings to life her emotions as much as your lovely poem does. I can just imagine the moment the sun is blocked out and the tomb is sealed.
Read full commentPosted in FAREWELL THE SUN (IP)
This is fun and educational.
Posted on Sat, 26 Apr 2014
This is fun and educational. Loads of great rhymes add to the fun, and that first verse - I loved that. Brilliant!
Read full commentPosted in A is for Aardvark –
Hi Lindy.
Posted on Tue, 08 Apr 2014
Hi Lindy.
I like the story, especially the parts where it comes through her own thoughts, and in the brief dialogue. It might just be me but the first half sounds a bit too 'telling', if that makes sense, and I wondered if it could be...
Read full commentPosted in Knit One Slip One Part 2
My dad couldn't do that
Posted on Fri, 28 Mar 2014
My dad couldn't do that either, aside from being somewhat inconsiderate to slugs, he's a softy too. It was pretty heartbreaking at the time. I kind of imagined I could crush up worms for it, but everyone was against any effort to save it. I've...
Read full commentPosted in The Longest Day
I think this is brilliant,
Posted on Mon, 24 Mar 2014
I think this is brilliant, Tina. I love the seemingly glib tone as you summarise life listing the facts with a throwaway casualness that is half bitter, half sweet with a clever wit that softens what is in places, sad but also factual. My...
Read full commentPosted in Once Upon a Life...
I see the scene clearly
Posted on Sun, 23 Mar 2014
I see the scene clearly through your words.
Read full commentPosted in Girl on a horse
Good title and great opening
Posted on Sun, 23 Mar 2014
Good title and great opening lines. For me, the honest simplicity throughout this piece makes it very moving and a great tribute.
Lovely words.
Read full commentPosted in Unconditional
There is such anguish in this
Posted on Thu, 20 Mar 2014
There is such anguish in this. So often missed - that last moment, the last chance to be there. But it happens so often that I believe that it's difficult for someone to leave when certain loved ones are present and that they can only let go in...
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