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I have 390 stories published in 3 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 133416 times and 11 of my stories have been cherry picked.
32 of my 998 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 30 votes

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Rosalind J. Lee

 

Hi, no complaints recently!  See my work for sale below.

http://www.anglohenge.co.uk

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I play Empire. Kred from which I advertise my books, and enjoy the rewards...

i play Township on my kindle, which I find kind of relaxing :)

My stories

Draft poem - It should be quiet!

It would be quiet.... Except for the electronic hiss... that preludes the odd job Gods in. A virus collage in a corner blooms - Life caught in spiral...
Cherry

The Works Once... poem 1st draft.

The Works Once. I was the works once, bright, shiny, deep, took classes in earlier years, listened sweet. I spoke in five languages, heard the bird's...

Civic Duty

this is an attempt at a form, it isn't a perfect one, however I liked it, for the time being anyway.

Second You. Tube piece....

from "Brantley Goes Home!"

You Tube and back ground.

I'm looking towards You tube and performance due to a chap on here who does it! (blame him)

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32 of my comments have received 30 Great Feedback votes

1 Vote

bravo!

Posted on Thu, 27 Aug 2015

lovely :)

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Posted in Through fragrant Esplanades

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yes minimal poetry.

Posted on Wed, 26 Aug 2015

Nicely done, reads very well. 

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Posted in Five Days a Week

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loved the first stanza

Posted on Sat, 15 Aug 2015

not sure about the second one.  'Things' too vague. 

also '

As not-quite-water

Seeps out through the water. '    what does this mean?     The end of the poem should be satisfying it should conclude....   this fails to do this...

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Posted in Holes in the bag.

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I fear this falls short

Posted on Fri, 17 Jul 2015

of what it could be.  You need to carefully edit for places where when read aloud it doesn't run right.

things like: 'Did you watch us with your lamp-like eyes'  to 'Did you watch with lamp-like eyes'

which makes it more direct and...

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Posted in Mirror Angels - re-written

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I like this

Posted on Fri, 17 Jul 2015

you need to edit carefully now, and it should be perfect.

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Posted in Upon The Beach

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You get my vote!!! jelly babies all round!

Posted on Tue, 20 Jan 2015

thank you, this is an excellent poem. loved it. honestly.  you could tighten up a little in the first 2 stanza's as it bumps a bit when its read aloud, however I'm sure for you it reads perfectly :)

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Posted in Lifecycle

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hi

Posted on Sun, 03 Aug 2014

"Later, waiting for the dough to swell,
its fecund belly, pale and smooth,
I sipped Earl Grey tea from a bone china mug."

Loved this bit, the rest as I did yesterday, is a bit rambling.

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Posted in Baking Bread

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i write on trains too...

Posted on Fri, 06 Jun 2014

I like your focus in this peice.  it's clear and very sharp.

 

have you seen this?

http://www....

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Posted in Train Journeys

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lol

Posted on Thu, 08 May 2014

I'm concerned about the leggy jumper?   is this a real jumper?  mine only have arms...lol!

plus some of the descriptions of the doggies shortness - a vertical disability -are over emphasised and read a little bit clumsy and I personally...

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Posted in Small Secrets

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I really like the flow that

Posted on Sat, 03 May 2014

I really like the flow that you've put into this paragraph poem.  I do feel however to improve it you should take some time to read it aloud to yourself, then you can hear/feel/see where you can make your poem work much smoother.  You will find...

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Posted in The Happiness is Arriving

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