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35 of my comments have received 33 Great Feedback votes
loved the first stanza
Posted on Sat, 15 Aug 2015
not sure about the second one. 'Things' too vague.
Seeps out through the water. ' what does this mean? The end of the poem should be satisfying it should conclude.... this fails to do this...Read full comment
Posted in Holes in the bag.
I fear this falls short
Posted on Fri, 17 Jul 2015
of what it could be. You need to carefully edit for places where when read aloud it doesn't run right.
things like: 'Did you watch us with your lamp-like eyes' to 'Did you watch with lamp-like eyes'
which makes it more direct and...Read full comment
Posted in Mirror Angels - re-written
You get my vote!!! jelly babies all round!
Posted on Tue, 20 Jan 2015
thank you, this is an excellent poem. loved it. honestly. you could tighten up a little in the first 2 stanza's as it bumps a bit when its read aloud, however I'm sure for you it reads perfectly :)Read full comment
Posted in Lifecycle