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great imagery
Posted on Sat, 09 Nov 2019
love the feeling of childhood, the wooden and woolen connection, the moths and cicadias and how the fallen trees link to bleached bones and pennies from soldiers. Beautifully depicted.
very much liked the feeling of being on the journey with you, 'intermittent percussion' of woodpecker - I could hear it so clearly.... I'd have finished it without the last two lines because the scene is already painted well...
bounces along all sparkly like freckles, I heard that a face without freckles is a sky without stars and that they are the kisses of Gods and fairies....
Read it at her wedding eveyone will love it....might take out all the 'the's' in first verse, don't need them and without takes you closer to action (not I didn't say 'the' action) and as many of those other ones as you can...x
Enjoyed the language you used and the build-up feels very authentic.....and hands are very special to hold and they way they mould to yours........ not joined long enough to read all the chapters but well done for getting this far....
great imagery
Posted on Sat, 09 Nov 2019
love the feeling of childhood, the wooden and woolen connection, the moths and cicadias and how the fallen trees link to bleached bones and pennies from soldiers. Beautifully depicted.
Read full commentPosted in Trees on the Arapuni Road
lovely
Posted on Sun, 19 Feb 2017
very much liked the feeling of being on the journey with you, 'intermittent percussion' of woodpecker - I could hear it so clearly.... I'd have finished it without the last two lines because the scene is already painted well...
Read full commentPosted in Forgotten Copse
Beautiful, slow-moving, with
Posted on Wed, 16 Nov 2016
Beautiful, slow-moving, with great depth and warmth and humanity.
Read full commentPosted in Blue
what a delight....
Posted on Fri, 14 Nov 2014
bounces along all sparkly like freckles, I heard that a face without freckles is a sky without stars and that they are the kisses of Gods and fairies....
Read full commentPosted in CINNAMON FRECKLES
Wonderful poem
Posted on Fri, 13 Jun 2014
great verve, colour and having just come back from a walk and several stings climbing over a style, so true, really enjoyed this... thank you!
Read full commentPosted in Nettles
written with love and serenity
Posted on Sun, 06 Apr 2014
Read it at her wedding eveyone will love it....might take out all the 'the's' in first verse, don't need them and without takes you closer to action (not I didn't say 'the' action) and as many of those other ones as you can...x
Read full commentPosted in Coldplay wordplay wedding day
brilliant,
Posted on Tue, 01 Apr 2014
Enjoyed the language you used and the build-up feels very authentic.....and hands are very special to hold and they way they mould to yours........ not joined long enough to read all the chapters but well done for getting this far....
Read full commentPosted in school photos 72
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