102 of my comments have received 101 Great Feedback votes
I like the idea of a better
Posted on Fri, 29 Jun 2018
I like the idea of a better self being like a lost toy.
I don't know if you meant it to, but I find this a hopeful poem, reminds me of cutting off the mouldy bits of plants and suddenly they look so much better and you notice there were...Read full comment
Posted in No Better Past (IP)
this is beautiful! All the sh
Posted on Mon, 25 Jun 2018
this is beautiful! All the sh and th and oo sounds, made me think of softness but then the sh sound becomes the noise of a weapon "shaft’s full shining power" and it ends not soft at all with "bombarding light"
And it was so satisfying to...Read full comment
Posted in Brightness without burning
Thankyou so much Insert. I
Posted on Sat, 23 Jun 2018
Thankyou so much Insert. I wasn't sure. Thankyou for the cherries, too
Have been thinking about crisps for ages since hearing the packets will be here in 1000 years but couldn't think how to do it till read the poetry monthly idea. It is...Read full comment
Posted in In your shoes
I like this too, but had to
Posted on Fri, 15 Jun 2018
I like this too, but had to read it a few times to realise what you were saying. Found myself putting in line breaks? I do like the idea behind it and all the descriptions very much?
Feel you are gathering lots of whisps of thought with...Read full comment
Posted in The minutes and the hours
My partner believes dogs to
Posted on Wed, 06 Jun 2018
My partner believes dogs to be spirit guides. Duko seems to be guiding the narrator to a more peaceful place, helping him to accept a horrible truth rather than put life on hold while hoping for the impossible. I like that the two people who have...Read full comment
Posted in Duka's Return
I love the sense of movement
Posted on Fri, 08 Jun 2018
I love the sense of movement you have achieved with the rhymes and matching vowels:
"dazzling their speedy swooping/sweeping in and scooping"
And the quickness of "dart, smart, dirt, martin"
And I like the human bit in the...Read full comment
Posted in Treasured Mud Oasis
This is beautiful! So fluid,
Posted on Wed, 30 May 2018
This is beautiful! So fluid, the way the song pulses and the heart pumps to keep the wings moving quickly. Also, couldn't think how you make it clear that the last line is about coming back to earth, and wonder if it is the D's, which have a...Read full comment
Posted in May Sky Melody