It slides away too easily, slips between preoccupied fingers, light and temperature, shift, senses stir in the car park, pulled from routine’s waking...
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The narrator seems to be as
Posted on Mon, 20 Oct 2014
The narrator seems to be as much a ghost as the characters she happens upon, Floating through shared memories. This sensation also mirrors the sense of diembodiment felt when in shock,which works so well with the final image.
The narrator seems to be as
Posted on Mon, 20 Oct 2014
The narrator seems to be as much a ghost as the characters she happens upon, Floating through shared memories. This sensation also mirrors the sense of diembodiment felt when in shock,which works so well with the final image.
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There is something s gentle
Posted on Fri, 10 Oct 2014
There is something so gentle in this. I like that it is in first person, the act of falling is so compelling, the irony of the helpful woman.
Read full commentPosted in Living on the Edge
Each episode is clearly drawn
Posted on Wed, 08 Oct 2014
Each episode is clearly drawn. Great stucture, leaving us with a little stab in the heart.
Read full commentPosted in An apology to Archie
Absolutley wonderful! A
Posted on Sat, 04 Oct 2014
Absolutley wonderful! A brilliantl character, funny and touching.
Read full commentPosted in The Diary of an Aspiring Hitman - Chapter 1
Another wonderfully evocative
Posted on Wed, 01 Oct 2014
Another wonderfully evocative poem. This has such a stong sense of place and timelessness. A renaissance back to nature. Beautiful.
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Funny and heartbreaking at
Posted on Sun, 28 Sep 2014
Funny and heartbreaking at the same time. Love it.
Read full commentPosted in Passing Through
What a wonderful story.
Posted on Sat, 27 Sep 2014
What a wonderful story. Weighty with legend and place. It is written like a story to be read aloud.
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Very dark, very readable, the
Posted on Fri, 26 Sep 2014
Very dark, very readable, the odd technical error jars.
Read full commentPosted in Do what thou wilt
From the dreamy days of
Posted on Thu, 18 Sep 2014
From the dreamy days of summer to dreamy snippets from lessons, lovely.
Read full commentPosted in The ABC of Zoe
i'm enjoying this and agree
Posted on Thu, 18 Sep 2014
i'm enjoying this and agree with vera's comments, now we're this far on it would be good to feel a bit closer to your characters.
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