Rose and I were mucking about on the pumice. We were walking on the rocks to smooth our feet. Mum said people paid good money for pumice in the shops...
Good idea styx. I'm not suggesting myself as I am not even slightly funny, not on purpose anyway. I've partnered up for some writing with Noo on the site, nothing professional though. There are quite a few deliberately funny writers on the...
Love the way this has ended, you kept Dorothy's family at arm's length and their coldness seemed so threatening to Akil it was a relief that he was removed. Lovely perspective.
The central part of the story works really well, a father shaken by the idea that it might have been his daughter who was killed and changing his life. I'd really like more of a sense of India.
A nice sense of voice and a good structure, building to revelation. I got a bit confused with the mother-in-law line, as I though the voice was a student's then moving to an older adult, but then is seemed to be a student's again, so perhaps...
Oh my goodness! This is
Posted on Tue, 30 Dec 2014
Oh my goodness! This is utterly heartbreaking and beautifully written.
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Good idea styx. I'm not
Posted on Thu, 25 Dec 2014
Good idea styx. I'm not suggesting myself as I am not even slightly funny, not on purpose anyway. I've partnered up for some writing with Noo on the site, nothing professional though. There are quite a few deliberately funny writers on the...
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A touch of beauty amidst the
Posted on Mon, 23 Dec 2013
A touch of beauty amidst the drudgery of killing. Always like this I suppose. Thought-provoking.
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I like the perspective of the
Posted on Sat, 20 Dec 2014
I like the perspective of the old man, this adds some depth.
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A unexpected ending, justice
Posted on Thu, 18 Dec 2014
A unexpected ending, justice seems to have been done.
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Wonderful writing, showing us
Posted on Wed, 17 Dec 2014
Wonderful writing, showing us the dark place.
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Love the way this has ended,
Posted on Tue, 16 Dec 2014
Love the way this has ended, you kept Dorothy's family at arm's length and their coldness seemed so threatening to Akil it was a relief that he was removed. Lovely perspective.
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The central part of the story
Posted on Tue, 16 Dec 2014
The central part of the story works really well, a father shaken by the idea that it might have been his daughter who was killed and changing his life. I'd really like more of a sense of India.
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This is so beautiful.
Posted on Sat, 13 Dec 2014
This is so beautiful.
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A nice sense of voice and a
Posted on Thu, 11 Dec 2014
A nice sense of voice and a good structure, building to revelation. I got a bit confused with the mother-in-law line, as I though the voice was a student's then moving to an older adult, but then is seemed to be a student's again, so perhaps...
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