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She is washing her paws, so, I found the feeling of brittle tension you have made very strong (though seeming delicate, as does a spider web.) Also the respect mixed with revulsion. And "you are not a god, Arachne" a put down to disguise fear ?...
Every time I try to write a comment on this Tina walks on the keyboard. Perhaps it is because she is advertisng her spider catching skills :0) I will have another go. I thought this was great!
I'm sorry, I didn't mean to be rude. I find them scary, like hag fish. You describe their lives so well, particularly the mysterious revelation that compels them to go back to where they started
"shoal-less silvered fish" that's so scary/lonely, reminded me of in films when the tether breaks on a spacewalk. "silvered" makes it magic, and sad. And I love the alliteration! This line will be my mind-worm for today I think!
I find this too! People are more likely to smile and say something even than before, to make up for going round, or saying thankyou if I go round. And people talk in the queue outside shops, where before they would just go in. Maybe to make up...
This is how I imagine being in a bobsleigh, exhilarating and liberating, with the potential for terrible injury if the person it is about finds you out. Particularly liked
this one made me think of
Posted on Sun, 10 May 2020
this one made me think of white witches, wanting to make something good , using nature and time, to heal. I like the smoothing of water vowels too :0)
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She is washing her paws, so,
Posted on Fri, 08 May 2020
She is washing her paws, so, I found the feeling of brittle tension you have made very strong (though seeming delicate, as does a spider web.) Also the respect mixed with revulsion. And "you are not a god, Arachne" a put down to disguise fear ?...
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Every time I try to write a
Posted on Fri, 08 May 2020
Every time I try to write a comment on this Tina walks on the keyboard. Perhaps it is because she is advertisng her spider catching skills :0) I will have another go. I thought this was great!
I am scared of spiders, too. But found this...
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I'm sorry, I didn't mean to
Posted on Wed, 06 May 2020
I'm sorry, I didn't mean to be rude. I find them scary, like hag fish. You describe their lives so well, particularly the mysterious revelation that compels them to go back to where they started
Read full commentPosted in Lampreys
"what you understand is
Posted on Wed, 06 May 2020
"what you understand is darkness" Powerful! Those first four lines are so sad. No possibility of nature v nurture
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covagants :0) Or is
Posted on Tue, 05 May 2020
covagants :0) Or is that mixing root languages?
Read full commentPosted in A Literary Squirrel
a feeling of glory, golden,
Posted on Mon, 04 May 2020
a feeling of glory, golden, then gone. Splendour is the word
Read full commentPosted in Canal Walk in Summer
"shoal-less silvered fish"
Posted on Sat, 02 May 2020
"shoal-less silvered fish" that's so scary/lonely, reminded me of in films when the tether breaks on a spacewalk. "silvered" makes it magic, and sad. And I love the alliteration! This line will be my mind-worm for today I think!
I...
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I find this too! People are
Posted on Fri, 01 May 2020
I find this too! People are more likely to smile and say something even than before, to make up for going round, or saying thankyou if I go round. And people talk in the queue outside shops, where before they would just go in. Maybe to make up...
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This is how I imagine being
Posted on Fri, 01 May 2020
This is how I imagine being in a bobsleigh, exhilarating and liberating, with the potential for terrible injury if the person it is about finds you out. Particularly liked
"she’ll squeeze your life
Til the dreams fall out"
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