I wasn't sure how to get to Sainsbury's, but Terry seemed to know the way - telling me 'next left' or 'next right' in that robotic monotone of his. "...
I like the way you bring these things together, Bee: a casual phone conversation about the trivia of ordinary life, bringing us up with a shock to that final final line. To be honest, I hadn't taken much notice of the title until I'd...
Another gem, Bee. I like the way, too, that there's a wave-like structure to the stanzas. I agree with Bear, too, on how you've worked those breaks and run-on lines together. Nicely done.
That first stanza pulls you right in. Who could...
I can't believe I overlooked
Posted on Sat, 22 Feb 2014
I can't believe I overlooked leaving a comment on this, Hespera - maybe because everyone had said it all. But still...
Scratch is right: it's utterly convincing. So much about it rang true for me on a personal level. That sense of the...
Read full commentPosted in 03.02.2014 - The Noose*
Good, Jess. Well... not bad!
Posted on Fri, 14 Mar 2014
Good, Jess. Well... not bad! I like this piece. I hope you're going to post more. Write from the heart, mate - it's where the best stuff comes from
Read full commentPosted in Mental Illness
I like the way you bring
Posted on Mon, 17 Mar 2014
I like the way you bring these things together, Bee: a casual phone conversation about the trivia of ordinary life, bringing us up with a shock to that final final line. To be honest, I hadn't taken much notice of the title until I'd...
Read full commentPosted in Suicide Notes
Here you go, Bee. Best I can
Posted on Fri, 07 Mar 2014
Here you go, Bee. Best I can do...
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Read full commentPosted in Capturing Beauty
Another gem, Bee. I like the
Posted on Tue, 04 Mar 2014
Another gem, Bee. I like the way, too, that there's a wave-like structure to the stanzas. I agree with Bear, too, on how you've worked those breaks and run-on lines together. Nicely done.
That first stanza pulls you right in. Who could...
Read full commentPosted in Humanity
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