Zabeth

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TypeTitleAuthorRepliesLast updated
StoryLove letter (IP) Chessnut Eyes41 year 3 weeks ago
StoryNine Zabeth21 year 4 months ago
StoryPenumbra Zabeth11 year 4 months ago
StoryThe Hitchhiker (part two) Zabeth41 year 5 months ago
StoryThe Hitchhiker (part one) Zabeth01 year 5 months ago
StoryPassage (revised) Zabeth51 year 6 months ago
StoryCaptcha Zabeth11 year 6 months ago
StoryParallel Lines luigi_pagano61 year 6 months ago
StoryEnglish is a colorful language jxmartin41 year 6 months ago
StoryThe voice in the Labyrinthe well-wisher11 year 9 months ago
StoryLone Wolf Dismayed Zabeth31 year 11 months ago
StoryRain Zabeth12 years 1 month ago
StoryShadow Zabeth12 years 1 month ago
StoryPassage Zabeth42 years 1 month ago
StoryHazel Zabeth72 years 1 month ago
StoryBody of Evidence Zabeth32 years 1 month ago
StoryHazel Zabeth72 years 1 month ago
StoryGolden Boys Zabeth12 years 1 month ago
StoryGolden Boys Zabeth42 years 1 month ago
StoryTrigger, Please Zabeth12 years 1 month ago
StoryOn Irony Zabeth12 years 1 month ago
StoryPost-Breakup Zabeth32 years 1 month ago
StoryBedtime Zabeth32 years 1 month ago
StoryDesk Zabeth22 years 1 month ago
StoryInaugural Miss Zabeth02 years 1 month ago

My stories

Cherry

Nine

Something I whipped up for the Inspiration Point- a prose poem, nine lines, nine words each.

Penumbra

An old poem that I never thought was particularly good (poetry is not my strong suit), but the inspiration point reminded me of it, so I thought I'd post it to see what others thought anyway.
Cherry

The Hitchhiker (part two)

Part Two of a short story. Not intended to be split, but because of character limits it's in two parts- please read together. This is a first draft so feedback is appreciated.
Cherry

The Hitchhiker (part one)

Part One of a short story. Not intended to be split, but because of character limits it's in two parts- please read together. This is a first draft so feedback is appreciated.
Cherry

Passage (revised)

Second draft of the first story I posted, in which a summer camp canoe trip through the Canadian wilderness becomes an unexpectedly disturbing rite of passage.

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4 of my comments have received 3 Great Feedback votes

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Good use of the ole "unreliable narrator"

Posted on Thu, 24 Nov 2016

You do a good job of giving an honest glimpse into the mind of someone who is justifying their own actions by blaming the other person. Good job.
A couple of technical notes:
I think you need to keep an eye on your grammar,...

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Posted in Alter Ego

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Thanks for your feedback!

Posted on Sat, 13 Aug 2016

This is very helpful. Just to clarify, Hazel is not the name of the main character, but the word on the sign she encounters just before discovering the slave chambers. Was that not clear? If not, I'll go back and try to clarify. I guess maybe the...

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Posted in Hazel

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I just joined ABCTales, and I

Posted on Wed, 29 Jul 2015

I just joined ABCTales, and I've learned that it's a UK site. This is demonstrated by this most British piece of writing- I assume the author is British, because no American or Canadian (which I am) could make birdwatching this poetic. 

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Posted in Summer Flights