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The Time Saver's Daughter

Tomorrow, just another day, but tor her...

The Time Saver

Chinks nicked here and there fell amongst the change he couldn't pocket - should have spent it. Enjoyed odd stolen moments - could have, should have...
Cherry

A poem to Silver Spun Sand

A flock of lovelies yodeled over and I thought of her...
Cherry

Life Lessens

Posted a first draft of this, then read it and thought, what were you thinking! Then removed it. So here is a hopefully, improved, or at least, less crap edit.
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295 of my comments have received 281 Great Feedback votes

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Line 6 - could take out 'be'.

Posted on Sun, 14 Feb 2016

Line 6 - could take out 'be'. Lovely romantic, rhyming poem with a dancing sway that fits in with the tide being pulled in by the moon, 

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Posted in The moon in the man

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You kind of said it  - it's

Posted on Sat, 13 Feb 2016

You kind of said it  - it's the fear of the unknown that's hard to handle because our mind gets filled with wild imaginings. But you already know you have cancr - you're not going to hear anything really new, just a number and how much treatment...

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Posted in We are Afraid

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The unsaid speaks the loudest

Posted on Fri, 12 Feb 2016

The unsaid speaks the loudest in this piece. Louder than the verbal abuse. 

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Posted in Pink with Purple Peonies

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I don't know anything about

Posted on Thu, 11 Feb 2016

I don't know anything about golf, but I loved this. Lovely rhymes and funny. I can just picture the scene. 

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Posted in According to the Birdie

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So powerful and simply

Posted on Mon, 08 Feb 2016

So powerful and simply heartbreaking. I wept too. Nothing hard hearted in your poem - it's like standing aside and seeing and actually being at the same time. 

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Posted in THE ONE IN THE NEST

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I think the 'we' is like an

Posted on Thu, 04 Feb 2016

I think the 'we' is like an attempt at disassociating the mind from the subject, but it does have that effect after a while, on the reader as well. You got that disbelief that this could possibly true, yet knowing it must be, just right. And I...

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Posted in We Can't Believe We Have cancer

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Even borders are no barriers

Posted on Sat, 06 Feb 2016

Even borders are no barriers where passion can be so easily ignighted by the senses. After the 'satisfaction' achieved alone, the last line can be taken in a couple of ways. Either - alone until we meet again, or - as in signing out - until we...

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Posted in An Ocean Apart (poetry monthly)

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The last line finishes this

Posted on Sat, 30 Jan 2016

The last line finishes this off so neatly. Looking back on such companionship is so strongly inside us that the slightest trigger such as similar weather and scents of the changing seasons zoom us back into any given moment. I loved this. I'm...

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Posted in The Way of Rain...

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Oh my goodness! That last,

Posted on Wed, 27 Jan 2016

Oh my goodness! That last, you can't even answer that or theyll smile knowingly like you've just made their point. You can't win. And I hate when someone starts with - 'I don't mean to be rude, ' or 'don't take offense, but...' You just know it's...

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Posted in Shut it (and other words)

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Hi Tina.

Posted on Sat, 23 Jan 2016

Hi Tina.

I couldn't stop thinking of the idea of this continuous repeat - the piece meandering off course to a non specific end. Guess it would still be Da capo al fine, but by then we wouldn't notice. I thought this was clever, and as...

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Posted in Da Capo

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