Mark Say
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I have 72 stories published in
3 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 180781 times
and 104 of my stories have been cherry picked.
143 of my 772 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 145 votes
My stories
The Straw Man (part 2/2)
A young boy is distressed by what his father does to a scarecrow
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The Straw Man (part 1/2)
A young boy is distressed by what his father does to a scarecrow
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Indian Church
A hunted man finds an unexpected source of sanctuary deep in the forest
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Colour Between the Folds
All I wanted to do was stare at white, until I encountered the curtain, the projector and the mimes
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Meeting Tara
A middle aged man hears from a woman claiming to be his daughter.
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Works well
Posted on Mon, 21 Jan 2019
I think it takes some time - maybe a little too long - for the tension to build, but once the creature emerges it's effective, and the twist at the end works nicely.
You need to be more consistent in your quotes: it changes between one and...
Read full commentPosted in When a Cold Wind Whistles
Clever idea ...
Posted on Tue, 01 Jan 2019
... and a charming tale. Nice one ked.
Read full commentPosted in Closing Chapters and Starting New Ones (IP)
Is this a morality tale?
Posted on Sun, 16 Dec 2018
Not sure, but it's s slyly funny, entertaining story that builds a nice air of intrigue and comes to a satsifying conclusion. Nice on Assassin.
Read full commentPosted in A Light Supper
Nice piece
Posted on Fri, 23 Nov 2018
I liked the gentle, suggestive quality of this, paintine some vivid pictures of the places and hinting at a connection through the sound of the piano. I couldn't help seeing it as the opening scenes of a European art house movie. Is it the...
Read full commentPosted in Melancholic pigeons from Berlin.
Uplifting
Posted on Sun, 28 Oct 2018
Considering it's an extract this works very well as a standalone piece. A credible slice of the type of angst that affects many people at some stage in their life, but with a nice uplifting conclusion. Good one Harry.
Read full commentPosted in Gift: A Son's Story (short extract 3)
Very sad....
Posted on Fri, 10 Aug 2018
... but quite uplifting in a way as well, and the narrator's big choice is quite credible.
One typo: you talk about a temp making positive notices when I think you mean noises.
Very good story drew.
Read full commentPosted in Words to the Wise
Very sad ...
Posted on Sun, 29 Jul 2018
... but powerful in its honesty. I'm sure a lot of people go through these emotions when a loved one who has been seriously ill for a long time passes away. And I like the way you convey that in a lot of little details about the narrator's life...
Read full commentPosted in Those Moments
Very sad
Posted on Sat, 16 Jun 2018
This might come across as a bit too quick and a bit too brutal, but I'm sure it represents the way some people treat their children. It pulls together a lot about parental favouritism, impatience and a heartless competition between siblings that...
Read full commentPosted in Choose One Cake Only
First rate story Kilb. I
Posted on Thu, 26 Apr 2018
First rate story Kilb. I liked the way you use a few details to convey Robert's memories of the marriage and the dynamics of the new relationships, and create an underlying tension with the lump in his stomach that couldn't realistically be...
Read full commentPosted in Something Hard Inside Him (Part 2)
It rings so true
Posted on Wed, 07 Feb 2018
As someone who was once an occasional, and unwilling goalkeeper on Sunday mornings, I can identify with this completely. The sense of desolation does take one to a spiritual place that would have been a great inspiration to Shakespeare.
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Read full commentPosted in The Hapless Goal Keeper at Yeadon
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