Mark Say

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I have 70 stories published in 3 collections on the site.
My stories have been read 143113 times and 99 of my stories have been cherry picked.
135 of my 733 comments have been voted Great Feedback with a total of 137 votes

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Cherry

Indian Church

A hunted man finds an unexpected source of sanctuary deep in the forest
Cherry

Colour Between the Folds

All I wanted to do was stare at white, until I encountered the curtain, the projector and the mimes
Gold cherry

Meeting Tara

A middle aged man hears from a woman claiming to be his daughter.
Cherry

Sea Monster (part 2/2)

A young man, war at sea, and Turner's malevolent vision.
Gold cherry

Sea Monster (part 1/2)

A young man, war at sea, and Turner's malevolent vision.

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135 of my comments have received 137 Great Feedback votes

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Very sad....

Posted on Fri, 10 Aug 2018

... but quite uplifting in a way as well, and the narrator's big choice is quite credible.

One typo: you talk about a temp making positive notices when I think you mean noises.

Very good story drew.

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Posted in Words to the Wise

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Very sad ...

Posted on Sun, 29 Jul 2018

... but powerful in its honesty. I'm sure a lot of people go through these emotions when a loved one who has been seriously ill for a long time passes away. And I like the way you convey that in a lot of little details about the narrator's life...

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Posted in Those Moments

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Very sad

Posted on Sat, 16 Jun 2018

This might come across as a bit too quick and a bit too brutal, but I'm sure it represents the way some people treat their children. It pulls together a lot about parental favouritism, impatience and a heartless competition between siblings that...

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Posted in Choose One Cake Only

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First rate story Kilb. I

Posted on Thu, 26 Apr 2018

First rate story Kilb. I liked the way you use a few details to convey Robert's memories of the marriage and the dynamics of the new relationships, and create an underlying tension with the lump in his stomach that couldn't realistically be...

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Posted in Something Hard Inside Him (Part 2)

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It rings so true

Posted on Wed, 07 Feb 2018

As someone who was once an occasional, and unwilling goalkeeper on Sunday mornings, I can identify with this completely. The sense of desolation does take one to a spiritual place that would have been a great inspiration to Shakespeare.

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Posted in The Hapless Goal Keeper at Yeadon

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Very effective

Posted on Fri, 11 Aug 2017

It shows how efforts to deal with a social problem with a strong degree of humanity have been undermined in recent years. Excellent piece Elsie.

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Posted in 2002-05 My memories of working at a hostel for homeless men

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Yes, it's like that ...

Posted on Sat, 30 Jul 2016

... and that's speaking as someone who's spent decades commuting in London.

Very impressive torscot.

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Posted in District Line ( London competition)

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Simple but uplifting

Posted on Sun, 10 Jan 2016

A few well chosen phrases, an uncomplicated but effective construction, and a postive message. LIked this.

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Posted in In A Lifetime...

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Interesting idea

Posted on Sat, 19 Dec 2015

I got into this from the first few lines, and found the shift to a human character interesting, but felt it was left open ended. Is it meant to be the beginning of a longer work

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Posted in Raal

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So good

Posted on Sat, 14 Nov 2015

As always, it's poignant without being sentimental, and I love the way you mix the realist images of the hospital with the spiritual visions of a departing soul. Lovely Bee.

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