35 of my comments have received 34 Great Feedback votes
Posted on Sun, 02 Dec 2018
Funny, warm hearted, and I like the way you focus on a detail of modern history to convey the relationships within your family.
It could do with a proof read: there are some typos and you need to decide whether or not you are spelling out...Read full comment
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Posted on Fri, 23 Nov 2018
I liked the gentle, suggestive quality of this, paintine some vivid pictures of the places and hinting at a connection through the sound of the piano. I couldn't help seeing it as the opening scenes of a European art house movie. Is it the...Read full comment
Posted in Melancholic pigeons from Berlin.
Posted on Sun, 28 Oct 2018
Considering it's an extract this works very well as a standalone piece. A credible slice of the type of angst that affects many people at some stage in their life, but with a nice uplifting conclusion. Good one Harry.Read full comment
Posted in Gift: A Son's Story (short extract 3)
Very sad ...
Posted on Sun, 29 Jul 2018
... but powerful in its honesty. I'm sure a lot of people go through these emotions when a loved one who has been seriously ill for a long time passes away. And I like the way you convey that in a lot of little details about the narrator's life...Read full comment
Posted in Those Moments
Posted on Sat, 16 Jun 2018
This might come across as a bit too quick and a bit too brutal, but I'm sure it represents the way some people treat their children. It pulls together a lot about parental favouritism, impatience and a heartless competition between siblings that...Read full comment
Posted in Choose One Cake Only
First rate story Kilb. I
Posted on Thu, 26 Apr 2018
First rate story Kilb. I liked the way you use a few details to convey Robert's memories of the marriage and the dynamics of the new relationships, and create an underlying tension with the lump in his stomach that couldn't realistically be...Read full comment
Posted in Something Hard Inside Him (Part 2)
It rings so true
Posted on Wed, 07 Feb 2018
As someone who was once an occasional, and unwilling goalkeeper on Sunday mornings, I can identify with this completely. The sense of desolation does take one to a spiritual place that would have been a great inspiration to Shakespeare.
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Posted in The Hapless Goal Keeper at Yeadon