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uncovering oneself (6)

By celticman on Wed, 04 Jun 2014

My head throbbed like a man stuck upside down on the Big-Wheel carousel. Blackouts were called blackouts for a reason, not knowing which way was up...

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uncovering oneself (5)

By celticman on Sun, 25 May 2014

With money in my pocket I walked quickly to the Atantis bar. Sammy Small Talk was perched in his usual seat at the bar, a half pint of lager in front...

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uncovering oneself (4)

By celticman on Sun, 18 May 2014

Bogey was glad to see me. Charlie wasn’t, but he held the back door open to let me in. Mum stood in the doorway between kitchen and hall and frowned...

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uncovering oneself (3)

By celticman on Fri, 16 May 2014

The downstairs bar shut. I bought a bottle of Buckie from the Off Sales. It was more expensive than usual, but I was more flush than usual...

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1881 of my comments have received 1940 Great Feedback votes

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well written, I was wondering

Posted on Thu, 27 Nov 2014

well written, I was wondering how she could have an organism when dead (which is a physiological impossibility) then she came 'alive' again in the bathtub. Interesting.

Posted in The (Nec)Romancer Part 1

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yep. gritty and groan filled

Posted on Thu, 13 Nov 2014

yep. gritty and groan filled and full of dis-ease, but truth often hurts.

Posted in not quite AA, but only 12 steps to the bar

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cheers scratch, just playing

Posted on Fri, 07 Nov 2014

cheers scratch, just playing with words. Thanks Shannan, I wish I knew what it meant too. Often (more often than I'd like to admit) I've not got a clue whant a poem is and more often than that what it all means. I'm pretty good at deciphering...

Posted in raring

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fall in love ju[s]t by its

Posted on Fri, 31 Oct 2014

fall in love ju[s]t by its words' I often wonder what poety is (and is not).

Posted in A Poets Mystery Lane

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Home from school for the

Posted on Tue, 28 Oct 2014

Home from school for the Summer, I had been enjoying a leisurely reintroduction to home, taking my dog Barney out for walks [Back from school > that way you don't use home twice in the same sentence]

from los parentes [should this be...

Posted in A Wake for Barney

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cast (not callously caste)

Posted on Tue, 21 Oct 2014

cast (not callously caste) although caste is perhaps nearer the mark. I'm sure everything will turn out wonderfully well when your shoplifting skills get better. I thought paracetamol screwed up your liver (not your kidneys) and was usually fatal...

Posted in The Diary of an Aspiring Hitman - Chapter 2

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good twist and it does seem

Posted on Tue, 21 Oct 2014

good twist and it does seem to match fairy lore, perhaps the last paragraph is unnecessary?

Posted in Wind Dancer

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Nature is as precise an

Posted on Wed, 01 Oct 2014

Nature is as precise an accountant as any. [delete last two words]

Wonderful story and the telling it of it wasn't bad either, spicy and full of sausage (oh dear, couldn't help that pun).

Posted in The Ministry of Kisses

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had to look up arpicity.

Posted on Sun, 28 Sep 2014

had to look up arpicity. Enjoyed the mixing of astronomy, metrical feet and hands and knees. In other words I enjoyed this poem. Almost there with Ex. You've done a great job. A little more and you'll be there. Where, I'm not sure exactly.

Posted in Rosalind

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dimly-lit students'. You

Posted on Fri, 26 Sep 2014

dimly-lit students'. You maybe better finding another description that's too much like a light bulb.

.There's no such thing...' ditch the full stop at the begining of this section.

Do what thou wilt is the whole...